Reviews for heartbeat
Sub-Commandante Manuel chapter 1 . 8/18/2007
Not abstract enough to provide a real unearthly sense. Too clear to be fractured. This needed more balance of real/shattered thought to make a good read.
Tytherpol chapter 1 . 7/16/2007
i like the scattered and detatched feel/tone

it's really cool wording

i like how you write.