I love this story, i think that it is really cute. i think that it is written really well, but once again, where can this story go? you should have, in my opinion, split the game into another chapter, and told more things of their relationship, the trails i guess. i don't know but you seem to finish a lot of your stories in the first chapter. and though i love the story, how many boys do you know who cry and are even mildly emotional? because i don't know any. so, is it supposed to be fantasy? i mean that sounds horrible and i am sure that there are nice guys out there but have you meant any that have ever said that they want to find out what love is like? i haven't and i just wondered if i was missing out on something.

anyways, you are really good at writing short stories.

umm i was wondering if Marc had like multiple personalties because it seems like he does, like sometimes he is sweet and sensitive and other times he is all man.

i would really love this story to expand more and be more than just a one shot. i think it would be a really good story.

aww how cute. I just read your first story and liked it as well. is there going to be a third?

aw, this was cute, and he's gonna propose! I loved all the humor!