Reviews for clayboys, ska, drunk driving, and swedish fish
rust phoenix chapter 1 . 3/17/2008
I love this. You've got so much going on, but it all seems to fit together, especially how the last line ties it up.
Tytherpol chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
crazy. when i'm in 'bookstores' watching ppl drink coffee etc, i jot down one-liner notes/descriptions.

a lot like this.

but you tied them together with questions. which i think really works.

there were a couple of times in this where my heart didn't stop exactly, but it sort of sank a little because there are a couple of places in this that are just incredible.

ie "blistered feet turn burnt and black

writing pseudo-inspirational quotes on coffee-stirrers

and shoving them in the perfectly manicured green

like headstones"

holy wow.

i sort of didn't like that there were no stanza breaks.

the stage directions were pretty sparkling. they remind me of a technique that the author of 'the brightest ring of angels around heaven' (not very great book at all btw) did. but i really liked that chapter. he wrote it as if on stage, using no puntucation etc.

anyway, it's a very awesome poem.

nice job.