Oh! That was a great~

Very light-hearted and fluffy but dramatic and horribly morose as well.

I'd have to say Bronny's a little dense and disagree with how she let her sister push her aorund, I'd smack my bitch up...O_O That wasn't right, but you know what I mean.

I love love love the playful banter between Matt and Matt himself and I love Emery, he sounds so beautiful.

But yeah, great story me thinks!

Wow...confused...why is her sister acting that way? Hm...

Okay, so originally, I was going to leave a review for each chapter but FP was being an ass and didn't want to load.

Anyway.

*ahem*

WARNING: Please brace yourself for fangirlism and CAPS LOCK overload. You have been warned.

. . .

THIS. IS. FOCKING. AWESOME. LIKE. WHAT. THE. FOCK. This is utter genius! I loved it. I love it. You are awesome!

BRONWYN'S A KICK-ASS MAIN CHARACTER! I love how selfless she is although it's pretty er...stupid of her to attempt to make everyone happy. But hey, it's the thought that counts! SHE IS JUST FANFREAKING AMAZING! I love how she narrates. I love her quick wit and I love her thoughts. Brilliant. Just brilliant.

EMERY'S THE HOT GUY EVERY GIRL WOULD LIKE. I mean, he's really sweet and all. I love his character and he's definitely perfect for Bronwyn but let's face it, Cobe is more awesome.

I mean, yeah, Emery and Bronwyn, they have that chemistry. They have that connection. They're a match made in heaven.

BUT I FIND COBE HOTTER. And much more appealing. I mean, he's actually my favorite character in the story. Which is why...

*pretends to talk to Cobe*

COBIE! COBIE! COBE! COBALT! I LOVE YOU WITH ALL MY HEART, WITH ALL MY ATRIA AND WITH ALL MY VENTRICLES! DUDE! YOU ARE JUST DAMN STUNNINGLY AMAZING! YOU MADE ME SWOON...LITERALLY! WHICH COME TO THINK OF IT, IT'S AN AMAZING FEAT SINCE NO OTHER CHARACTER WAS ABLE TO DO THAT TO ME, OR AFFECT ME THAT WAY. ANYWAY, I DON'T GET WHY BRONWYN DOESN'T LIKE YOU BACK. YOU'RE BASICALLY PERFECT! YOU'RE SWEET, BUT NOT SICKENINGLY SWEET. YOU'RE CHARMING, MYSTERIOUS, CAPTIVATING, ADORABLE AND DEFINITELY SWOON-WORTHY! COBE! MARRY ME. NOW. MARRY ME. FORGET HER AND BE MINE. BE MINE! ALL MINE! SERIOUSLY. I'M GOING TO LOVE YOU AND FEED YOU AND PET YOU AND HUG YOU AND DID I MENTION THAT I LOVE YOU? WELL YEAH. I DO. I'LL EVEN DEDICATE BRUNO MARS' "MARRY YOU" TO YOU!

It’s a beautiful night,

We’re looking for something dumb to do.

Hey baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Is it the look in your eyes,

Or is it this dancing juice?

Who cares baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Well I know this little chapel on the boulevard we can go,

No one will know,

Come on girl.

Who cares if we’re trashed got a pocket full of cash we can blow,

Shots of patron,

And it’s on girl.

Don’t say no, no, no, no-no;

Just say yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah-yeah;

And we’ll go, go, go, go-go.

If you’re ready, like I’m ready.

Cause it’s a beautiful night,

We’re looking for something dumb to do.

Hey baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Is it the look in your eyes,

Or is it this dancing juice?

Who cares baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

I’ll go get a ring let the choir bells sing like oh,

So whatcha wanna do?

Let’s just run girl.

If we wake up and you wanna break up that’s cool.

No, I won’t blame you;

It was fun girl.

Don’t say no, no, no, no-no;

Just say yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah-yeah;

And we’ll go, go, go, go-go.

If you’re ready, like I’m ready.

Cause it’s a beautiful night,

We’re looking for something dumb to do.

Hey baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Is it the look in your eyes,

Or is it this dancing juice?

Who cares baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Just say I do,

Tell me right now baby,

Tell me right now baby. x2

Cause it’s a beautiful night,

We’re looking for something dumb to do.

Hey baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

Is it the look in your eyes,

Or is it this dancing juice?

Who cares baby,

I think I wanna marry you.

JUST CHANGE GIRL TO BOY, KAY? I LOVE YOU! O_O

*end*

Okay, so basically, I loved this. You have some serious talent. You are just - wow. Just wow. I'd like to read more from you...perhaps a sequel for Cobe-dearest? *hint hint*

- Cee

What's up with Amber? Meh, I'm going to sound mean but-well, what the fuck is up with her? She seems so... obsessed with the guy. She's freaky. D: Shocking how much a guy can do to a girl.

I once reviewed your story Winged, if I remember correctly. It was a while ago, but I remember that you replied despite how popular the story was, and I appreciated that. This is one of those stories that I've always seen around on places like SKoW and people's favorites, and have always wondered to myself, "I wonder if it's any good? I should read it someday." But then I never do.

Funny what procrastination can do to a person. ;P

The first thing that struck me about this story was that it was well written. Bronwyn's character was flowed in some of the most realistic fashions, and I liked that. I also liked her first initial interactions with Emery, that awkward, almost-standoffish sort of dialogue that always happens, but so many people don't seem to capture. And then, as they became more familiar with each other, I liked how they seemed to get along on multiple, tangible levels. Sometimes it's hard to describe why characters get along, when you read stories, just that they do, but it wasn't hard here.

Unfortunately, I had figured out Amber's point of view by the end of the second chapter by asking myself "What would make ME act like that?" I also knew that Opal and Emery were related from the moment I read the "Opal and her dimples" that you mentioned in passing, when Bronwyn was talking about her work for the first time. It was obvious to me, because characters don't share traits like that in stories unless they're related.

So I wasn't surprised for most of the story, though the Emery-smoking thing did admittedly catch me off guard. I didn't quite understand the purpose of that habit, actually. You mentioned it once, showed him going to the hangout a couple of times, and then had him saying that he had quit. If you just wanted an excuse for him to go to the hangout, why not just say that it was the place where people went to skip school? Like I said, the detail seemed a little slapdash.

I hadn't quite expected Cobe to start liking Bronwyn, either, but when it happened I wasn't shocked. Murphy's Law, right? Anything that can go wrong, will go wrong. I was kind of sad that you just left the guy hanging, actually, after Bronwyn was finally given permission to date Emery. Felt like a... loose end? I liked Cobe so I didn't want him to be left sad? I dunno. Something like that.

I think the reason I kept reading even though I had figured out most of the plot, was because I liked the characters. They were enjoyable, reminded me of a couple of people I know, I liked their dialogue. And I wanted to see what Bronwyn would do, when all the shit hit the fan. I was actually quite interested and intrigued up until the end of the 17th chapter, where she decided that something between herself and Emery just wasn't going to happen. Now THAT's not something you see every day. It would be interesting, I thought, if things stayed that way. What a nice change of pace, if Amber stubbornly held out for years and years and years.

She didn't, obviously, and personally I found the ending anticlimactic and not at all satisfying. It wasn't that Amber gave in (that followed her character quite well, actually), it was more... it felt rushed, I guess. It felt like you were breathing the biggest sigh of relief to finally finish this story, and to just hurry up and crank out this chapter so you can move on with your metaphorical writing life.

I can't imagine a better ending, admittedly, but I find myself inexplicably unsatisfied with this form of closure. It just... didn't work for me. I don't know. That's just my opinion, take it or leave it. Like I said, I can't imagine a better scenario, but that is the truth, the whole truth and nothing but the truth, so help me god.

Besides the last chapter, though, I did sincerely enjoy this story. I like your writing style, and it's obvious you've worked at it. I look forward to what some of your other stories might have in store for me, however belatedly. :)

'Til next,

CD 1.0

I quite like this story right now. You're an Aussie too! Isn't Matt white a presenter for todaytonight on channel 7? Haha. I love your John Howard analogy. It's quite cute but Bronwyn's mum must be really fast at having kids, considering that amber and Bronwyn are only like 9 months apart. Like like like!

thank god amber didn't end up the bitch i thought she was ! she actually is ok - a little screwed in the head but ok ( it was her fault after all but anyway)... i really liked your story . the interactions between Matt and Bronwyn(btw cool name)and Andy are hilarous!

wow... that's some suspense... nice chapter

I love Matt! :D

Naw, this was so cute! I majorly bunked off doing revision for this, but you know what? So worth it. (Although I probably won't be thinking that when I fail...) Thanks for a great read! :)

Even though I liked the story a lot, I couldn't help but root for Cobe!

Ahahaha. xD

Awesome. I really enjoy your storytelling ways.

Even if I guessed this right, I wouldn't exactly call it predictable. Predictability is something that bores you, which is definitely not the case of this story.

I'd consider it more... cause and effect driven? You can suspect something but you get to have fun trying to figuring it out.

Oh, can I guess again?

I love guessing, so yeah: could i be... that his sister is Opal?

Double risk guess: and that the guy who bought the last CD earlier is the other brother?

But really, don't answer. That would be a spoiler. xD;;

Hah, I suspected it already, but now it's obvious: Amber knows that Bronwyn and Emery are too alike and that she'll lose her boyfriend if they so much at meet.

Oh the tragedy xD;;

It's an interesting idea, though. Also, the characters are too adorable. I really am liking the story.

I love your story! GAh!