Reviews for hear me now
Allegra Lena chapter 1 . 7/31/2008
Wow, that was...shocking, in a good way. :) I really liked the descriptions of the girl and how she changes, especially the line about making a mime seem loud, it added more intensity to her changes. I didn't really like the line about stealing one last, dry, lonely kiss because I thought it was a little vague...was the boy with her? and other questions came to my mind. Except for that line, it was excellent.
deefective chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
This was an interesting piece. I like how you took the almost perfect character at the beginning and changed her into the opposite of what she was. Good job with description also. The only thing I don't like is the part 'She turned the knife against herself". It seems a bit out of place in the whole thing.