|Reviews for The Sandals|
| Saran-Wrapped Daughter chapter 1 . 3/14/2011
That was beautiful and so sad. Perhaps before you enter it, or anything, check for just ONE thing.
I noticed her tenses switched at some points. IE:
"He had fought in the war, but a bomb blast has crippled his leg."
The story indicates past tense, but "a bomb blast HAS crippled his leg" makes it seem like it is in present tense.
Anyway, keep on writing. This was grat, and sad.
| eiyuang999 chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
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| Leon Trotsky chapter 1 . 1/22/2010
Oh God. That was just beautiful. Utterly devastating, but beautiful nonetheless.
| Bri-Cathleen chapter 1 . 12/30/2007
this is...really sad
im almost crying
and thats a big achevement
| LuckyFearie chapter 1 . 8/6/2007
I like it! But is it just a One-shot...? I'm impressed you know a bit about Japan.
| Encarin chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
Very good. You should enter it in the contest.
| SavRm4MiLuv chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
| Herineca chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
i love this! but its so sad...
im sad now
| Ancient History Lover chapter 1 . 5/29/2007
Oh my gosh! So sad! I loved it though! Really great! Kudos!
| kewlllllll chapter 1 . 5/29/2007
I would watch for spacing, spelling and the alike if you're entering your story in a competiton. Make the family more personable and put more details. I'd up the girls age to 4 or 5 from how she's acting and the persona surrounding her.
It looks good though! :)