I was wondering when you're going to update?

Sweet! third chapter definatly the best! Nice storline...i personally love the max ride books.

*thinks* can't think of anything wrong w/it!

I like the story very much I love the charecters personality. I think my favorite charecter would have to be Simba :33 I love his name x3; I especially like the name of the group: The Pride x33 I find the irony being that A pride is a pack of lions and Simba was the name of the lion in Lion King. LOL. Anyway, Update soon :3 I can't wait to read more~

-LOOMY.

It's still getting dangerously close to Max rewrite with different character names, they really don't need to find their parents. If they did they wouldn't choose a time when they're being chased.

Another point, you really should change character POVs unless it's absolutely needed and in this part it isn't, you don't want to confuse the writer when writing in first person because it's very easy to do and its an unattractive quality when the reader has to think 'who am I reading from this time?'. If you want to change character POVs often you might want to consider a third person POV (he, she, they, it...)

but if I chose to keep them furled

You used unfurled then furled; it not a very good idea to repeat words like this. Try closed, or tucked.

"Copters!"

People rearely shorten helicopters names this way, it's usually 'choppers'.

Uh...this story is awesome. How'd you manage to do it? ;)

I think that Autumn is hands down my favorite; she sounds hot, and her no-nonsense attitude mixed with the fact that she has absolutely no common sense makes her the perfect candidate for me.

If only she were real, we might've been able to date...*sigh*

Oh, Yay! I'm loving this. Great dry humour; makes the fact that they're running for their lives a little more interesting!

UPDATE PLEASE!

Wow. Like this chapter. Can't wait to see what turns out next. You said to give ideas on what we'd like to happen? Well..how about some whumping for characters all around...and they manage to go to a town..where they get chased by the cops? What's more fun that that?

Anyway, great story overall. Keep it up. UPDATE SOON, I tell you! ;D

And, like the Immolator creeps, us six could morph. Unlike those Immolator creeps, we were good guys. And girls.

This statement is really flat. You draw a definite line between good and bad and that is a thing you should never do in a story.

...intense bird-like green- gray eyes...

I've seen a bird with grey eyes, green. yello, orange, even red, but I cannot recall a bird with green or green grey eyes. If you are going to write about animals please, please, please, please, please do some proper research!

Dash was mixed with hummingbird and cheetah. (Now you see why he’s so fast)

If Dash as spliced with a humming bird he wouldn't be hyper just because of that. Humming birds are fast because their diet consists of sugar and similar nectar like substances. Not because that's how they we're born to be fast, if it gets to cold or they don't have food within a few minutes the go into a hibernative type sleep.

...white tiger DNA...

There is no such species call 'white tiger' there are Bengal tiger and Siberian tigers.

Also it would be best to cut most ties for Maximum ride because it make your story seem like a rip. Also that book is poorly written, the charcters were very flat and that not what you want. You want you audiance to feel as though they could be in the story if they wanted to, not just viewers.

This as a story is off to a good start. However it reminds me of Maximum Ride the Angel Experiment, which bothers me because that really wasn't a good book. Also you characters seem to powerplay/god model (they seem to get out of very tough situations almost effortlessly). You might want to add a bit more action to help with that.

Simba, Twitch Sniff and I ...

Commas needed between items. (Simba, Twitch, Sniff, and myself...)

...were fully open, ready to get me airborne...

I feel as though this sentence could use a bit of revision, something just doesn't sit correctly.

Also parentheses should be avioded when ever possible. You could of told her name in a diffrent way.

It's a good story, good written...

However, your characters are not that good. To put it straight, they are Mary Sue. The background is far from original. Try to get some more complicated parts in your background story.

I know, its not a fanfic, but I have got to put these characters w/ the other ones! at least guess! ok here we go:

Autumn- max (easy)

Simba- fang

Twitch- Iggy (luv iggy! srry, couldn't help it!)

Dash- Gasman (totally)

Serra- Angel (i don't really know)

you know what? never mind. give me some time to figure it out. cuz I'm lost. (laughs nevously)

I like the tension btween Simba and Autumn. I think my favorite character is Dash, because of his...rather...hasty personality! Can't wait to read about the helicopters!

Oh, I love this story! Simba's my fave character so far lol. Unique names!

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!

:D

Max Ride fan? me too, no worries. yay, totally awesomeness. I know another person writing one like it. Max Ride inspired. If this isn't Max Ride inspired, I will be really embarrassed and feel stupid, but tell me if I'm wrong. '-';

update soon, tho! :)