I like this. It's good because it could and has happened. It adds a thrill to reading it. I think that even though you aren't sure you should write more. You never know where things will lead and if you write more you just might find that you like it. I assume that the italics are thoughts? Right? otherwise, that girl likes to talk to herself. and that would work to. I guess. it's not that unnatural.

He does talk strangely. I think this is going to be a really good story! Can't wait for the next upcoming chapters. :]

Great start! I'm not quite sure what to make of this story yet. I guess, I'll wait and see for the next chapter:) Update soon!