oh my gosh.

they KISSED!

SO cute

and i loved the chapter by the way

Xavier's house - sounds...

swoon-worthy.

haha

can't wait for the next chapter!

izzie

Wow...this story is amazing so far. Please continue and keep up the wonderful work!

UPDATE SOON!

Whoa, they kissed! I wonder what Lucas was thinking when that happened lol. Loved it!

Update soon!

~Mia

nice, update soon.

I think you may have overdone this a bit. However, this is a matter of opinion, and I'm sure a lot of people liked it.

The only other thing I have to say is about the Adonis comment. Adonis wasn't a god, but he was a figure in Greek mythology. He was so incredibly delicious that both Aphrodite (love) and Persephone (Hades's wife, growing grain) both wanted him. The gist of it is that he spent time with both of them and was eventually killed by a wild boar, probably sent to him by Ares or Artemis for revenge. Google it, whydoncha? Could be interesting.

Basically what I'm saying is that you say, "... modern day Adonis. If not a Greek God." Adonis nearly WAS a Greek god, and he was more gorgeous than all of the Greek Gods put together, so... yeah. It just seems a bit odd.

Oh, and "god" there should be lowercase, as it's always lowercase when dealing with a polytheistic religion.

Forgive an old stickler for her criticisms, please.

Well, first, I just wanted to say: Awesome job!

REALLY good writting, events that keep your interest in the story and words that play out the characters' emotions and the mood perfectly. It's not easily done in third person narrative, so, again, Great Job!

I'll admit that the first chapter was a little slow, but after the second chapter I was hooked!

The two climatic events in the story so far were written in an exquisite manner and the imagery you used is...WOW

No, "Wow" won't even cover it.

Elizabeth's grief brought by the death of her friend, and her blissful first formal kiss with Xavier were the apotheosis of literal mood...it was genious!

Keep writting!

Wow.

This chapter was so well-written (as always), and each scene was so brilliantly put into words (duh). There were a few cliche lines, but then there were also a few I-Wish-I-Thought-Of-That lines, so whatever. xD

I love the way you wrote the kiss scene-it was so innocent, and so intimate. Perfect, I swear.

[Someone had been hit with the pretty stick once too often.] Dude, do you watch Gilmore Girls? If you don't, that will sound like a random question, but that's the first thing I thought of when I read that line. xD

Keep writing!

;)becky

P.S. I feel kinda bad for Lucas. I know they're just friends, but them being on a date and all...I didn't really get to fully appreciate all the Xavier/Ellie moments. Yeah, that's probably just me. Still, I wonder what Ellie's gonna feel like. SO UPDATE SOON! xD

ah fantastic! i loved it! ]

Ahh! Too cute. :D :D :D

Wow, I was felt ashamed to read that. It was so beautiful. I can't even tell you how much i loved that. You are an amazing writer, then imagery in that was astounding. I love love lovveed it! and Michael Bublé is one of my faves. While i was reading this, i was like.. If she put Hilary Duff or something in this.. it would totally ruin it, But it was the perfect song, the perfect chapter, and the most amazing imagery i think i've ever read on this site. Wow.. Well done, this was perfect and beautiful... Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read this.

The Happy Carrot

aww! very sweet! update asap!

aw cute chapter...finally they kissed...hope you update soon

wow. D didn't see that coming. nice song though. :D and he is a greek god huh? LOL

OMG! I love your story so much! I'm always checking my emails for your next chapter. Please don't abbadon this story and update often. Thank you very much!