Reviews for Conquer a Cynic |
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![]() ![]() ![]() OMG what an amzing story! I love it, when i read the brief i was skeptical but now i am hooked please tell me you are planning to write more? *puppy eyes* I really enjoyed the story and i hope you will continue xxphoenix |
![]() ![]() Nicely done. I have to say that for one so young you stop short of being verbose (a blessing) and continue to avoid the pitfall of the inevitable cliche. Much obliged and keep up the pen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yo, you really need to update some more man. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh heck. I'm freakin' crying! Update soon! Or else! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Might I suggest a Beta reader? That way, you can squash all the silly mistakes, and possibly gain more fantastic fans! Xavier is sex. I keep imagining him as someone like Ben Barnes... (insert romantic, heart fluttering music here) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Work on punctuation, missy! I'm starting to grow more fond of the story as I go further through the chapters. Mrs. Barton freaks me out! She's like a teenager in the body of a teacher! Actually, she is almost like, well, me. Crepy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Elizabeth seems to be incredibly selfish (even if she was mistreated growing up), and rather obnoxious in some aspects. An unnatural hatred for Jane Austen's work is one thing, but attacking her mother completely out of the blue? Gah! I still like the story, though. But would love to see more of her personality. Maybe a little peak into her head? A reason to her madness? Hm? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I feel a bit like I'm reading a manga. I'd suggest working with more paragraphs rather than single sentences, and possibly go over this for punctuation errors. I love the concept of the story, but would like to see more...meat. Maybe a bit more about the characters in the first chapter, so it feels less like there is something missing. Anyway, on to the next post! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, depressing. Still major points for not having the cliched airport reunion. |
![]() ![]() ![]() what? she goes back home? :( |
![]() ![]() ![]() so will his father think that he made a mistake and there was one girl who would have married him for love and not money? |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh. this is sad it's very good but sad what comes next? dare i ask? |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOW! OMG! Please update soon! Your story is so great! I want to know how it ends and what happens next!:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() MY WORD... IF YOU DON'T UPDATE THIS INSTANT... YOU WILL BE IN BIG TROUBLE MISSY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey i enjoyed the chapter, i was expecting something like this. All i ask is that you update real soon like next wek:)if it's not to much for you:) |