Reviews for Always
AluminumMuse chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
Oh, very pretty. Erm... maybe not pretty. exactly, but good. I quite like it. I think a piece like this could use some off topic tangents and specifics, to give the narrator some color and personality. Examples of the lies. Flashback like stuff.

I particularly like the line:

Candy-coated lies

A smile on my lips

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A little cliché, but the way you phrase it is nice. I could almost switch it around, candy-coated lips (lipstick to disguise the aging process/some much untrue though sugary sweetness) A smile on each lie (letting yourself get caught up in a world of lies.)

However, I think that the ending is a bit weak. I think you could build on the acting thing.

-Struck by inspiration!-

Acting is my destiny

I watch the lights rise

Something like, with some more stage references. Shut it, I don't pretend to be a poet, but I can certainly be a critic with some suggestions.

-Feather La
whispered something profound chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
lots of beautiful imagery in this one
silently watching chapter 1 . 6/7/2007
wonderful! i share ur feelings completely (assuming that this is written from life) i hope u learn 2 overcome ur probs (i hope i do 2!)

power 2 both of us

silently watching