If you finish this story and publish it, I would buy it in a heartbeat. I have read this story probably hundreds of times on and off for the past 6 years and I still love it to this day. Thank you.

I can't think of a single happy Belle and Sebastian song . It's fair to criticize B&S for being too twee, too precious, whatever. But happy? Sorry, still not over this.

Wow. You dissed Belle and Sebastian. Might stop reading just because of that.

Okay. Well, this is definitely good. You had good description, and the first few paragraphs hooked me in immediately, which was new. Even the best of stories take a while for me to get into them, but this one's effect was immediate.

I'm usually one for dialogue—it's how I usually portray my characters' feelings, and you can depict personality through it—but you pulled off the first chapter nicely without much of it, which is why it's surprising that you held on to my attention. I usually drop off after five or more paragraphs of straight description.

I noticed that you write a lot of stuff like "My Mom" or "My Dad." If you didn't have the "my" before the noun, then a capital letter would be needed to start "Mom" or "Dad," but since the "my" is present, you don't need to capitalize it.

Oh but this is soooo fucking honest and you know you can't help but fall in love with honest.

Also, I feel like I should mention that since discovering it, I've reread this story about 6 times. Sad as that sounds, it's not an exaggeration.

Please please please please PLEASE update this! It's honestly the best story I've ever read on fictionpress. I think I said this the last time I reviewed, but if this were a novel I would totally buy it.

Please continue the story. I'm so hooked and have to know how to ends!

This argument has to be the best crafted dialogue exchange I've read, simply because you kept it real; I can completely relate and feel my own retorts bubbling up, and that Myra had "a zillion reasons" in mind without being able to voice any of them. I've felt like this many a time, and this hits home. It's a completely flawed argument because neither of them can think of the most effective words on the spot, which makes this a perfect scene.

This story inspires me to go rewrite all my work. Your way with words grabs me immediately; I've read novels before where I've had to force myself to keep reading in hopes it will get better later on. The way you describe emotions and characters' personalities makes me feel like little fireworks of excitement are going off. This is a story where I can't close the browser; I can practically smell Myra's excitement when she sees Aubrey, and it makes me want to keep reading. You had me at "Cold War."

Please continue this story! It's amazing and I love rereading it all the time!

Myra probably expected all of this to be happening to her. Aubrey really needs to get it together before he loses her for good.

thank you. I can't express anything else. I have been Myra, I am Myra, I have been Aubrey...you write exceptionally well. Please look into being published. For the sake of good literature.

Lol,interesting story...me likey the drug dealers(:

Oh man, please continue this story. It's so insanely good! I just... have no words. I do so hope you plan to finish it because I'm dying to get to the end.

It's wonderful. You're a great writer!

Please update, I am in love with this story. It is simply amazing. :)