|Reviews for Combustion|
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 6/8/2007
i wish you would have added a line between the first and second lines describing 'it'
and just left 'it' out entirely of the 1st line.
i adore the title you picked for this! it's so perfect.
oh! and i wish you would have added another adjective before 'curve' (line three). preferably one that gives another hint of the fire because honestly the only references you make to it are last line and title and 'plain.' by that, i mean adjective references where the reader can infer your /opinions/ about it, you know?
anyway, nice poem.