|Reviews for The Game of 'Love'|
| lilmissAchi chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
With regards to your other reviewers, I think they're quite right...
Your rhyming is a bit forced, but not really bad..
this would do better as a free-verse, but still it's fine, LOL
Uh, it's just that sometimes, rhyming and other rules could limit the potential of a poem...
And sometimes, poems should flow naturally
"Knowing that loneliness and I have a date..."
Are u an emo or something?
And ur pen name...LOST IN A WORLD OF PAIN?
HAhhah...don't worry...i'm a lonely loner too...
i love poems like this..
and hey, I like ur little structure there...
Align LEFT then CENTER...XD
Have a nice day
| anon chapter 1 . 10/19/2007
That is the way most people feel- thanx for saying it outloud
| antigonelives chapter 1 . 6/17/2007
Awesome poem! I do feel, though, that this would be presented better in some freeverse form - not that this is bad, but rhyming tends to limit a poem, if you get what I'm saying. Also, is there a reason for some stanzas being centred and some being left-justified? That made the poem harder to read; my eyes were EVERYWHERE.
Those last two lines were really powerful - nice sum-uppage.
| All Alone With Her Thoughts chapter 1 . 6/12/2007
First, sorry it's taken FOREVER to review. Things have been SUPER busy over here in Canada.
Second, I liked it. The rhyming seemed a little forced, though. Maybe try changing that a bit?
Love the last line, it's so true too...
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 6/8/2007
try loosening up your rhyme scheme, or letting it go altogether. it might make for a more original poem - which isn't met in a negative way, only saying, it's much easier to communicate a serious emotion or meaning when you aren't looking for that one last word that just has to finish out a rhyming stanza (for instanze, 'zoom').