Reviews for The Game of 'Love'
lilmissAchi chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
Hey!

With regards to your other reviewers, I think they're quite right...

Your rhyming is a bit forced, but not really bad..

this would do better as a free-verse, but still it's fine, LOL

Uh, it's just that sometimes, rhyming and other rules could limit the potential of a poem...

And sometimes, poems should flow naturally

Hehe..

"Knowing that loneliness and I have a date..."

aw!

Are u an emo or something?

And ur pen name...LOST IN A WORLD OF PAIN?

HAhhah...don't worry...i'm a lonely loner too...

i love poems like this..

and hey, I like ur little structure there...

Align LEFT then CENTER...XD

Have a nice day
anon chapter 1 . 10/19/2007
That is the way most people feel- thanx for saying it outloud
antigonelives chapter 1 . 6/17/2007
Awesome poem! I do feel, though, that this would be presented better in some freeverse form - not that this is bad, but rhyming tends to limit a poem, if you get what I'm saying. Also, is there a reason for some stanzas being centred and some being left-justified? That made the poem harder to read; my eyes were EVERYWHERE.

Those last two lines were really powerful - nice sum-uppage.

-Cristina
All Alone With Her Thoughts chapter 1 . 6/12/2007
First, sorry it's taken FOREVER to review. Things have been SUPER busy over here in Canada.

Second, I liked it. The rhyming seemed a little forced, though. Maybe try changing that a bit?

Love the last line, it's so true too...

Rowan.
dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 6/8/2007
try loosening up your rhyme scheme, or letting it go altogether. it might make for a more original poem - which isn't met in a negative way, only saying, it's much easier to communicate a serious emotion or meaning when you aren't looking for that one last word that just has to finish out a rhyming stanza (for instanze, 'zoom').