sounds interesting :)

This story is so beautiful.

It took me 2 days to read it, but well worth the time.

My only suggestion would be when you use "off" its supoosed to be "of".

Anywho I can't wait for more.[:

Oh, that was an amazing read. I think I may die inside if you don't post more soon :)

~carm~

I adore this story. It has just started and I cannot stop reading. I love it. My thanks to you for it.

Ah, I love this story! I saw the updates in my inbox and did an embarrassing little happy dance :)

Fantastic set of chapters, very well written, very flowing. But that wasn't the end, was it? It sure left the readers hanging, which is a good thing as well as a bad thing.

Hope to read more from you in the future!

~carm~

this is good so far, except for one part which was written in first person (the rest of your story so far is written in third). it is a little inconcistant, but all you need to do is change a few words so that it doesn't seem awkward.

this is the only area where you did this:

"She didn’t know what to say, all that he had said was true, yet the idea was ludicrous. How could she marry a vampire? A vampire? He promised he would not hurt her, but then so had Meralaus. “I cannot marry you. Kill me if you have to. Kill me now. I cannot marry you. I hardly know you and you are a vampire.” I spat the words out, words like poison, poison to my own ears, “That is the truth. I am afraid of you, I cannot marry a man who I fear and I shall not do it.”"

other than that, i like this, and now i'm off to read the rest!

I like happy endings. )

Loved your story, it was very well written, its obvious that you put lot of thought and time writting it. It was well detailed, you are an awesome writter:D Keep it up! All i can say is that you moved ur story a little 2 fast, especially in Chapter 6, the gurl hardly knew him but still they made love and how exactly agree to marry him so easily. Other than that you hav skills, and know exactly how to catch a reader attention.

Wow. This is an absolutely amazing story so far. Everything from the depth of each character to the quality of your writing is fantastic. Great job on this, and I can't wait for more :)

~carm~

Oh,forget that other review. The story was marked complete last time I read it and I thought it was the end. rating is perfect. Good story. The love scene was the best writing out of all the other chapters. Did you write that, but decide to give it a plot so it wouldn't just be smut? Anyway, very good. I liked it.

This was very good. Your writing has a victorian feel to it. A couple typoes around, but those are normal. You can also lower the rating I beleive. You'll get more readers that way.

I feel like i should toss rice!lol. AMAZING chapter, i love how you update so fast!

I would hate, to be forced into a marriage. BUT, i'm going to be doing the same thing in my story. Just dont tell! lol.

Another awesome chapter! The comment he made about her eating and him liking it almost made me blush a little!

very interesting! update! please!