Reviews for Don't Just Say It, Prove It |
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![]() ![]() ![]() nice story. liked it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved this story it was cute but i hate how dean didnt do anything wrong natasha always ruined everything and yet dean had to keep apologizing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really dont like Elle. lol but your an awesome writer! |
![]() ![]() ![]() ugh i really dont like Elle she pisses me off. but good story so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's cute but very cliche. I'm totally adoring Elle though. :) |
![]() ![]() Aw...that was a really sweet ending. Great resolution for a great story. Congrats. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I personally think this moved way too fast. A slow-paced story is better than a [too] fast-paced one. Always. Try describing before Elle moved, or add in a little somethings. It's missing A LOT of things. You wrote: “Elle... why do you have to move?”, a 10 year old boy with brown hair and eyes as blue as the ocean itself, asked. / You repeatedly put unnecessary commas. When you end a sentence with a quotation, period, or exclaimation mark, you do NOT need a comma. Btw, you made Elle and Dean sound as if they're 7. It hasn't been a decade since I was last 10 years old, and I KNOW that 10 year olds do not act like they 7 or 8. This isn't a flame. I hope you can take this as constructive criticism. ) (Btw, try re-writing this story. A story should always look its best, so why not? If it's because of laziness, then deleting it would be better than showing off a horribly-written one.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() love it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw. nice! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I guess i'll review even tough i'm so into it! LOVE IT! again. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! this is officially my favorite Fictionpress story. I LOVE IT! so awesome. Well right now i'm gonna go read the next chapter and it i'm not to into the story, maybe i'll review the next chapter -. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yea yeah! they made upp woo! ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() ah nothings going right / lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() ah! stupid natasha and skyler! |
![]() ![]() ![]() ugh stupid trenton |