Reviews for Gift of Sight retake
Kindre Turnany chapter 1 . 7/30/2007
This one was pretty too. But the last line is incomplete. It should say "But on memories" or something; it doesn't make sense as it is now.
Elegant Raven chapter 1 . 6/24/2007
It was good, but there were times where the poem didn't make any sense. The second stanza for example, doesn't fit the poem except for the first two lines. Also, some of the words you rhymed weren't complete. Example, the second to last line, what's familiar? It's still a sentence and it wasn't ended. It was still well done and I'd like to see how you improve. Keep going for the gold!