I like how Mirile notices Brietta's affection for the Kotaro.
I really want to know what happens next.
I also have to admit,I was very impressed at the history of "tomes".

Thanks

wow...is all i can say...

Definitely amazing! I love it! I was sucked into it when I read the intro! Keep writing! I wanna know more!.. I do wish I knew more about the characters tho.

Wow! This is definitely going in my favourites. I love it when someone posts an elemental fantasy story! I've never tried an elemental, but I know that even if I did, it would NEVER compare to Fantasmagora. :)

I don't really have much criticism for you. You have a couple of typos and tense errors, but who doesn't? I only wish there was a little more character development. But other than that, I think your story is amazing. Ah, the descriptions are lovely, too!

Please, please, PLEASE continue writing. Because when you do, I'll be there to read it. Promise! Keep up the good work!

~Wren

Intriguing! I love the premise of magic being locked away. Keep writing, you have an interesting story so far!