When complete strangers start thinking you're going out, it's time to do something. Usually you deny it vehemently, or that's what I do when faced with that 'dilemma'. So they're not Capulet-Montague enemies, but they're not "know all your closest secrets" friends either. I like how you're developing this slowly and not just rushing into the story with an "I can't like him, can I?" Poor Mike; he doesn't even have the 'a/hole rival' thing to convince Kim.

UPDATE SOON!

Okay, this chapter was alittle boring, but I'm excited to read the next one! Some grammatical errors here and there.

Hey!

Well, I found this story through a C2, and let me say, I'm really enjoying it. The idea behind it is very unique. In my opinion, many of the stories on here all have one central theme - either it's a girl falling in love with her twin brother's best friend, or her falling in love with her best friend, or a guy doing the same...there's not a large amount of unique material on this site. And I'll be the first to confess that I'm a bit guilty on that part. But this story is excellent. Your style of writing is fresh, and I absolutely love your analogies.

Anyway, you're doing some excellent work here. I'm off to read your other story, the one you mentioned about Drystan, so you'll be hearing from me again. Update soon, please, and keep up the good work!

Allie

Hmm... Very interesting plot. I was really drawn into it when I read the summary.

Awaiting.

haha it's cute

and i would like to note two things-

"12:00 AM Sunday watching cartoons on Cartoon Network (anime of course). "

OMGOMGOMGOMG

next:

"Bird by Bird by Anne Lamott"

OMGOMGOMOGMOMGG

well, i finally have one piece of criticism- i think that drystan's character as a supposedly 'popular' guy is hard to believe, especially since he seems so antisocial. but we've only seen him for 5 ch. anyways so POST MORE.

i just love the chemistry between drystan and heidi

interesting name.

like DIE STAN, as in you have sadistic urges against random guys name stan. but oh wait, no, it's drystan- so stan must be very dry after you die dry him.

and now i see where the cliche comes in. yes. mr popular and ms loner.

"I don’t think you guys understand the point of observations. Don’t tell me how many cats there were hanging by the gutter, or what colors made up the lake. I want depth and emotion, which I don’t think any of you fully recognize.”

THAT QUOTE really reminds me of a certain um...english teacher i had. my god. demanding a difference between description and imagery. THERE IS NO DIFFERENCE. but..okay...just pointing out that there's very blatant comparison between that teacher...what was her name?...havershield? and my english teacher. scary comparisons.

AND I LIKED THIS CHAPTER OKAYY. nice describing of the meeting- at least it wasn't surreal and everything where the guy's like, "OMG YOU'RE HOT, I'LL LET YOU STALK ME, EVEN IN MY UNDERWEAR." very realistic.

absolutely creative. i'm still getting hold of how fresh this storyline is compared to the same old [that i've read anyways]. i like it, honest okay.

'KAY I LOVE IT.

i stopped reading fictionpress like a long time ago cause everything was same old, same old, even the stories taht were getting a whole bunch of reviews.

but your beginning is amazing- unlike ALL THE OTHER STORIES, which always somehow starts off w/ some alarm clock going off, the heroine falling out of bed and cursing violently, at least your beginning is interesting.

and the high school is more interesting than the boring queen bee high school- at least it's not surreal.

yeah, see "'KAY I LOVE IT" really sums up everything.

I love how she sneers Jackass under her breath after she whispers a goodbye to him xD

I just finished reading these couple of chapters, and I truly liked them. Your writing style is so down to earth and realistic, that I really enjoyed reading your storys. And, yes, I read both. But since they're connected, I chose to review this one. Although, I'll leave you a review on Commencement too, when you finish it.

The last thing I'd like to say is that you have a fantastic way of describing your characters. They seem more human and real than in some other story's I've had the pleasure of reading. Well, keep up the brilliant work.

Wow, I can't say anything more but WOW. I mean, it seems like such a genuine story. You can relate, and the plot is just so amazing and well planned. Now, I could go on making your head bigger but I think I should save some for the next chapter-which better be soon!- right, anyway I really enjoyed this story. The characters begin to grown on you. It is defenetly a different plot. I really fell in love with the story. If this was a novel I would not sleep until I finished it.

HAHA! UPDATE I LIKE IT! Her projest is...wird yet mysteriuos.

Poor Mike...having to be told that, but it's a good thing he has Heidi to comfort him. We finally get the muse's name...Drystan...I like it; it's unique.

UPDATE SOON!