aww man they didn't get to kiss

This story is so fun to read. It's simple but at the same time it isn't. AND I really like where it's going. So keep up the great work! Oh, and thank you! :)

NU! just at the good part too, damn. please update soon!

lol you finally updated :p

i like it. and i won't even complain about the ending, because it was cute.

I'm glad Heidi and Drystan got over their problems. It figures she'd eventually break it off with Lance; at least he was understanding. I thought Drystan said he wasn't a great guy, but... he obviously let Heidi from his grasp which is nice. :) And uh oh with being caught by the pool guard.

Please, please, PLEASE write the next chapter. xD Seriously. I'm dying here. I know you just updated today - BUT PLEASE. Don't leave on a hiatus or something. I don't know about you, but I did that all too often (on fanfiction) and so, I just want you to know, you will be torturing us if you don't update.

But - first a little critique. (I'm an asshole. D; - but it says right there 'A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give'.) I found Drystan's character at first to be a little, well, cliche. Not that that's the main reason why that's 'bad', but it just lacked a little originality. After a while, though, I fell in love with him as hard as Heidi did. As for the plot, I really love the way you've put in all these 'random' occurrences - it really builds up their personalities. Another thing that was slightly cliche was their trio of friends - the two girl, one guy, and the other two best friends are smitten for each other. I've seen it a lot, and it always adds a nice touch, and you pulled it off particularly well - so kudos to you.

I also like how you had the whole love-triangle thing going on, and the way the other guy wasn't such an obvious 'no' (though, obviously, Lance never occurred to any of US as suitable), but I feel that Heidi was maybe a little, well, TOO clueless. HOWEVER, as before, you pulled it off well enough, and so, I ADORE her. OHOH! Hayden and that whole little baby-sitting thing was adorable. At the point when she was scolding him for coming home late? That was just too cute. xD

Ah - there was one particularly strong mistake that I spotted, among all the other small ones. Drystan's telling Heidi about the time Luke came in and hit Linda? Yeah, he tells her that Drystan was asleep - not Hayden. xD But it's pretty obvious who he's talking about. :3

And so this ends this long-ish review and, please, write more! I'm BEGGING you! I'm almost (almost) regretful that I stumbled upon this now - because I have to WAIT for chapters. xD

YES, I AM PISSED THAT THEY DIDN'T KISS! lol (:

I loved the interaction between Heidi and Drystan.. but you keep leaving us hanging with them never actually kissing! But that'll just make their kiss even sweeter though :) I didn't like Lance, but he's actually a decent guy for caring about Heidi's feelings for Drystan.

It's about time you updated, girl! I'm so glad high school is almost done.. summer, here I come! hahaha. But the thought of college scares me! :P Thanks for the chapter!~

Hot damn, I can honestly say that I'm completely in love with this story. I wish I could write as awesome as you do, everything seems to flow and fall in place together. I even find myself being nervous for the characters or in-depth with their emotions; not many stories do that, so I am just completely sitting here in stunned silence. In fact, I'm so excited I can barely type correctly, I keep having to delete and retype, haha. I know this story hasn't been updated in months or whatever, but I really really hope that you come back and add another chapter. I understand how stressful life can be with work and school and whatnot, but maybe one day you'll find those days when you can write. :) Agh, I want to say so much, but I can't find any another words to describe how much I am grateful to come across this. You're an amazing author and I'm sure after all the hard work in school, it will really pay off. Goodness, I am going to cut this short, because honestly, I'd probably just ramble; this is the longest review I've ever written- your writing is seriously that good! Haha. Stay amazing, and hopefully I'll be replying again soon.

BOO.

lol i see the inspiring comment that somebody left you!

i'm such a lazy loser that i don't feel like logging onto aim and actually telling you all of this in person. besides, you're already so close to the 250 review mark, i might as well bring you up there.

somebody once told me that good stories more than 300 reviews. so i think you should update some more so you can get to 300 reviews. i mean especially since you're in such a lovey dovey mode right now, it should be like really easy for you to write. lol

i'm trying to write a story too! but every time, it just becomes too hard to write as a guy, cause i have to rethink everything like, "am i being too pervy here? even for a guy?"

i love leaving long reviews-that-aren't-really-reviews.

I hate bugging authors. I honestly do. I realize that no one makes money off this website and everyone has personal lives.

But I love this story and I wish with all my heart that you would update it. It's an amazing story and the first one I ever read on this website a year ago. It's a great story and your characters are loveable, realistic, funny, and great.

I honestly want to see what will happen to Drystan and Heidi. I feel almost personally invested in their fictional romance/relationship. They work so well together. You've created two amazing main characters.

I know real-life is rough (trust me, I'm a first-year college student and so I know firsthand how demanding/tough high-school is) but at the same time, I wish you'd still find the time to scrap up the next chapter - even if it has typos all over the place, it'll be completely worth it to see what happens next in the chapter.

I'm really dedicated to this story and think it's awesome. It's one of my all-time Fictionpress favorites. As far as my taste in actual books goes, I'm more into fantasy-fiction but YOU got me into the Young Adult/Romance/Teen genre.

So, this is a very sincere plea from a reader: Please update. Or if you can't or don't like this story and don't feel like continuing it, please let us know. This story is great, so please continue if you want to, but if you're not, let us know, okay?

I hope you read this and realize that your story means something to one person out there.

Yours truly,

Kari

Haha, when i first read the story summary, i thought that you was the girl actually observing some random dude. I thought "Hey, who am i to judge? This is fictionpress, after all. People can write whatever they want." Then my bff conked me on the head and told me i was first chappy! Now i'm hooked!

Wow...

i think i just might love this story

PLEASE UPDATE

Great Chapter I love this whole story it truly rocks i hope you update asap

Aw, your story is so incredibly sweet.

I guess it was a little ruff in the beginning, but I love how your characters have developed.

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Saying this, please update soon!

i luv this story! itz in my faves, so update soon!