Reviews for The Amazing Adventures of Astonishing Man
spenny chapter 6 . 9/29/2009
hahahaha it was hysterical how clueless Clevette was. And she was a little obvious, but then again, she's 15.

It was much more realistic in terms of a developing superhero. But if she was ever going to be a superhero, she'd be found out so quickly... just way too obvious.
cinafran chapter 6 . 8/6/2009
I can't say I didn't see that comming, but it sure was a fun ride getting there. Thank you for posting this for others to enjoy.
Always Being Different chapter 6 . 7/29/2007
I'm sorry to tell you this, but I didn't enjoy the last two chapters as I did the others. It started to feel a bit unrealistic. And the fact that you kept trying to hide the identity of Astonishing Man, even though we all knew it from the very first chapter, was just a bit annoying. I liked the part where Lightning Girl tried to save the people from the mall fire, even though she has no ablities that could've helped her. But her immediate disgust of Jim just because he was smart and decided to evacuate from the burning building like he's supposed to, just felt silly and unrealistic. Also the big reveal at the end when Clevette does discover Astonishing Man's identity was a bit of a let down. You build up six chapters for "And there was Astonishing Man and it was actually Antonio, and then we talked." We really should find out both of their reactions to the discovery. Obviously, Clevette should be disgusted that she ever had a crush on her brother, and Antonio should be annoyed that Clevetter barged into his room at such an unconvenient time. And I still have one question that you might address if you decide to rewrite it: Why doesn't Antonio reveal his secret to Clevette? After all, he knows her? And what happened to Nick? Is he enjoyed after his beating? Did he eventually become friends with Clevette or just leave her alone? I'm sorry for the negative review, but I felt it could've been better. I enjoyed most of the story though, and you are a great writer. I just think you lost some momentum part way through the story.
Carmel March chapter 6 . 7/29/2007
Wow. Great ending. Wrapped things up, but left the reader thinking happily.

I just want to say thank you for writing this. You're amazing :)

Hope to see more from you in the future!



Thanks for the review! I can't tell you how much I appreciate it :)
Carmel March chapter 5 . 7/28/2007
Ah, I'm absolutely loving this. You've got me hooked. Clever storyline, interesting characters, wonderful writing. Great job on this, and I can't wait to see what happens next :)

SpawnMeister666 chapter 5 . 7/24/2007
An interesting tale...

Looking forwards to seeing where it's going to go from here...

Always Being Different chapter 4 . 7/20/2007
Once again, a very good chapter. The part where Clevette was shopping for parts to make her costume was a bit tedious. I understand that getting a leotard can't be the easiest thing, but I don't think it works as a major plot point. Too much work to find out that all she had to do was go to a dance shop. Other than that, it was perfect and enjoyable. I was glad to see that her study group lie was beginning to come back and haunt her, though I don't think you want as far with it as you should have, but you handled it well.
Always Being Different chapter 3 . 7/11/2007
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Especially the beginning part where Clevette tried to trick that boy into dating her. It was so filled with energy that never died to the end of the chapter.
TourqeGlare chapter 2 . 7/8/2007
A little cliché, but I guess thats the style.
SpawnMeister666 chapter 2 . 7/5/2007
A bit of a long and rambling chapter, and, in my opinion, not the best one you've ever written...

Still, I'm sure it'll get better now all the scene setting is done...

Always Being Different chapter 2 . 7/4/2007
Very good chapter. Very well written. I especially liked the way you described Astonishing Man's first appearance. I also enjoyed how you put most of the focus on the characters instead of making it a good vs evil battle to the finish type thing like most superhero stories. One thing you might want to watch out for is you have a tendency to explain things instead of letting us see things ourselves. Instead of telling us that Lynn was dumb, it might be better to give us an example in the narration. Also, instead of just saying that Astonishing Man cannot be hurt by bullets, show us! Have the robber shoot him, keep Clevette looking, show the bullet hitting him, yet he still stands. Other than that, I thought it was excellent. Update soon.
SpawnMeister666 chapter 1 . 7/2/2007
An interesting start...

Looking forwards to seeing where you're heading with this one...

J.Dietz chapter 1 . 6/30/2007
Sounds like an action flick. It sounds pretty good so far. Hope to read what happens after the blast.
Always Being Different chapter 1 . 6/29/2007
Very interesting so far. I love a good superhero tale. It could do with a bit more detail. The interaction between the siblings is just a tad cliche, but there's probably a good reason for that. Other than that, it's very promising. Update soon!