|Reviews for Falling Through|
| Necronomical chapter 7 . 7/5/2007
Wow, I just found this, and I have to say, it's really, really good. Most 'oh no I fell into another dimension' type stories are boring and overdone, but you've taken the old cliche plot and made it something new. I think it's awesome that the main character starts off seeming like the sidekick, and the promise of slash doesn't hurt either, lol.
Really, I can't find anything to criticize. Your spelling and grammar are exceptional, your plot is original and interesting, your characters are fascinating. I'm really looking forward to your next update.
| Rosey Prosey chapter 4 . 7/2/2007
I was very happy to find something this origional in the Fantasy section. It's nice to find the "cliché-with-a-twist" that's not just some plotless parody. I like the characters, and the only errors are just some harmless gramatical technicalities. Fantastic work!
| Evelyn O' Sullivan chapter 1 . 7/2/2007
I like how your story starts from the opening paragraph and cuts out any of the crap you often find in prologues. The main character is clearly shown as someone who sticks to the background, hides behind his friend's shadow, and lets people walk over him. But why does he disapear out of a basement office hallway? There is nothing to suggest that anything will happen or is happening, there's just nothing to step on and a flash of light. The last sentence makes no sense. Actually, I'm not even entirely sure what the last sentence is. Is it "And then;" in which case, it should be ... but really that doesnt fit, or is it "No really. Think about it." which is not much of a closer either. The first and last section of the prologue is the most important part, and while the opening is well written, the end could use a bit of work.
| RavenclawMoose chapter 3 . 7/1/2007
I like this story, and I like how Neil is the one they weren't supposed to get. It's amusing and not over the top with anything. That's a pretty refreshing quality in a FictionPress fantasy story.
| Sugarloafin chapter 1 . 7/1/2007
This is great! I love Neil and all his dialogue with himself, his lines had me laughing out loud. Very well done, I'd love to read more of this!