Reviews for Remnants
Teenage Tragedy chapter 1 . 7/3/2007
Wow, I really liked the meaning behind this poem. I was a little unsure of the formatting, but i still really enjoyed it.

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TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 7/2/2007
So while the style was very nice at first, it started dragging past the whole .22 part. I'd probably try editing it. A lot. While the lines all work and everything is technically fine, this poem felt way too long and drawn out. You could probably cut some lines out, or even make each line just slightly longer so that the impression is one of a shorter poem. What we think is a lot of it, too. The rhymes here and there are good and natural and I think that the short line lines ended up working well for your idea, even if they dragged on a bit. Overall, powerful and intenese. After a bit of editing, this could be an excellent poem. Great job.