|Reviews for Once A Slave III: Magebreak
| Nefas Fatum chapter 1 . 10/2/2007
I've enjoyed reading what you put up. Hope the publishing thing works out for you. Do let us know when it does, I'd love to read a hard copy of your story :D
| Naked Penguin Fetus For Pope chapter 10 . 9/14/2007
Jeez. I absolutely hate marketting sometimes. But I guess you gotta do what you gotta do. I adore this story, though.
| Phantos chapter 1 . 9/12/2007
Not wanting to turn this into a smear-fest, but "notafananymore"? Have the balls to post under a name people can reply to.
The ultimate goal of ANY writer is to get published... Posting here gives us a chance to gauge public reaction. I think the words you were looking for were: "Good job and good luck!"
| Kitsune Luvr chapter 10 . 9/8/2007
AW! No more story! I'm happy for you, but sad for me. lol. good luck with publishing, but I will miss finding out what happens next!
| Notafananymore chapter 10 . 9/7/2007
What was the point of posting all this time if you potentially knew that you wouldn't be posting the rest because you want it published. Sorry but it makes me angry when authors post stories on free sites then halfway through basically say you have to buy the book to find out what happens at end.
| Lavender-Drop chapter 10 . 9/7/2007
i...you...but...NO! PLEASE NO!
| ddz008 chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
Great chapter! Lark should tell him he loves him T_T but now this chapter may be the last one you post here! And he didn't tell him... So I hope you post it in other site or publish your book and I'll have to also hope that I can obtain it on my country. I like your new characters and I like Naeven and Lark even more. Hope you get your books published!
| Phantos chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
"Naeven, I ... kissed Vaelen."
Lark is more of an idiot than Sactaren (which is saying a hell of a lot).
This chapter seemed more your usual style. Witty dialogue, some subtle stuff that takes a moment to be funny.
I think part of why the chapters seem so short is that you're putting more dialogue than description. Part of what made the original story so great was the amount of description that supplemented the dialogue. Go back and read a chapter from Once a Slave, then read this one and you'll see what I mean.
| Anonymous chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
No! That's, like, a good no and a bad no. I hope you have some luck with the publisher but, on the other hand, I'm gutted because I doubt I'd ever be able to buy the book. It's hard enough finding such a good piece of writing on FP as it is. Best of luck anyhow, I'm more or less obsessed with this series. ;_;
| Rachelmorph chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
Wow! Now I feel absolutely horrible, because I always forget to review. But do know that I absolutely love your writing, and have been lurking since the beginning. I'll be hanging on the edge of my seat for you to publich, because I absolutely MUST know what happens. Good luck with publishing!
| Firetrap chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
*gasps* HOW COULD YOU? last chapter you post?
i have a feeling i won't be the only person expressing outrage
not everyone can go and buy books you know
either way it's a great story but ... well how could you?
| distortedreflection chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
What? Please tell me your joking. *crys* Are you posting it somewhere else?
| Abigail Radle chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
I understand your reasons for not wanting to jeopardize first rights to a potential publisher. That being said, I'm still interested in reading more of this. Would you be willing to email it to me?
I'd also be willing to assist you as a beta or first reader if you are interested in finding some editing or other assistance for your earlier volumes of the story. Let me know. :) I've got my legs, arms, fingers, toes and eyes crossed for ya, hun.
| Yukisa chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
Congratulations for the thing with your publisher, but knowing that this was the last chapter for us for a long long time (and me living in a country where the chances of getting the books are very slim maybe the end forever) I felt like crying. Especially becuase this is the best story I've ever read and... well... *sniffels* I guess I will miss them...
| DrummersEcho chapter 10 . 9/5/2007
Ok, I am Thrilled for you that it will be published! I have always had this on Author/Story Alert, so when you DO get it published, put up a new chapter with that information and I'll get an email about it and be even MORE thrilled. Best of luck with it all.