Reviews for Cousin's Chocolate
Alison Wright chapter 1 . 7/3/2007
Oh god. This is poignant in a way I've never read before. This resonates with memory and emotion and it's beautiful.

It could use a little tweaking though. :)

"Especially with a glob of chocolate from When you ate so carefully in your booster seat"

Okay, maybe you meant to say it like that but it distracts the reader. You could play with it so it's a more complete thought. Also, grammar - commas are your best friend when writing poetry.

Good work.

Lee