This is a very original story! I love it a lot. You had me there with the protagonist, feeling what he was feeling and it did take me a moment to realise who she was, which is a plus. I hate it when a story is ruined because you know what's going to happen right at the beginning.

Just one thing that annoyed me was "anyways". Gah, it's a peeve that I have. 'Anyways' is not a word, 'anyway' is. :D OCD moment over.

Liz xx

Aw. Cute story. I love the ending. Great job. I had this read this twice to really understand though. Thanks for writing it.

OH

That was very sneaky of you

with the red scarf that matched her hair

Very nicely done! *applauds*

I just read the Land of Red and what you have posted so far of the second one.

It was awful I was in tears and I was sobbing and you left me all snotty and unfinished and gr

but I can't blame you!

I blame procrastination in general. It's just this black hole of avoidance and temptation just calling out for me to ignore whatever it was I said I was going to do. Or whatever someone else is telling me to do and everything they say just turns into the teachers voice in Charlie brown and yea...

So. I don't blame you

I blame the awful things that distract and take away from you not giving me what I want which is obviously do switch back into the snivingly (not a word according to my compooper)mess I was not too long ago when i finished Land of the Red NUMBA ONE

I don't know what possessed me to say that in capitol letters but imagine an announcer guy saying it...maybe?

I'm just rambling now

but I really enjoyed what I have read of your works!

I just don't enjoy when the ...

neglect reader hornyness for another chapter syndrome comes about

and I'm left pondering what will happen

and

yea

mhm

goodnight

it's 3:38am and I haven't studied for my history test!

REDBULL HERE I COME!~

yay

sleep tight oh talented one.

Now thats love.

This was really good! It was different, and just fascinatingly intriguing. I really loved it . :)

This is so cute! OMG. I don't think I've ever read something like this before.

Congrats :D Love it!

~*~Ngoc1231~*~

Brilliant. :)

aw :)

so he's the fiance right? and he forgets things?.. like who his own fiance is? :P

thanks for the awesome oneshot! :) :)

Good read! Very unexpected.

I loved the plot. It was very original(:

It's beautiful.

~Annoyance

that was really really beautiful (i NEVER comment on stories either, i think this is the first time). this is really impressive writing for this website as well. i went back and reread several times. it was beautiful in its simplicity, that kind of sadness that makes your chest ache a little. really beautiful work, more like a piece of art.

wow...so romantic and unique! loved it!

How pretty. Simple yet effective.

That was fantastic! I realized it about halfway through and immediately went back up to reread. Great job!