Reviews for The Elvin Sword: To Get the Black Sword |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Good. Now that the history lesson is over, I take it the real story is about to begin. Looking forward to it. I just noticed something... shouldn't it be "Elven" not "Elvin" |
![]() ![]() ![]() Watch some grammar, like "or rather through he arm, it seemed". Otherwise, not too bad. There's a lot of stories about Elves and dark lords about, I hope you can avoid the normal cliches. Or just do a kickass job of telling them. |
![]() ![]() ![]() well, you very well might explain this later, but how did she get the mark? being descriptave is never a bad thing, and don't be worried about over description. if it is too descriptave and you don't like it, you can always change it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() interesting plot... but very short chapter! write a little more to catch interest.- i like the idea you get across though |