Reviews for Sometimes
elephant tears chapter 1 . 7/14/2007
sad/good! you should really keep putting poems up... I know that poems can really just get the fricken anger out some times. YAY WRITE MORE!...or else... lol
lymli chapter 1 . 7/8/2007
in this song you've really got to express deep feelings, you know, everybody can relate... good writing.
PadfootDavis chapter 1 . 7/7/2007
Oh my God! Martha, that was so GOOD. It was so true and so real! Some of your finest work. Good job. :)
GreetingsInBraille chapter 1 . 7/7/2007
As opposed to it being emo, I actually found it to be kind of the opposite. I read it as kind of hopeful, accepting that life has its downs and that you're not alone in your struggle. I could be way off the mark here, but that's how I read it, and I enjoyed it. I definitely think that it could be improved (there are some places that the rhyming seemed forced and the flow was a tad off. I don't know how the music goes so I could be wrong, but I'd sing through it and try to pick out any places where the flow seems off and tweak them.) But that's really all it needs is a little tweaking. You've really got something here, and rather than coming off as emo and whiny, it comes off as empathetic towards other people, kind of a "lets get through this together" sort of peice. Nice job.