This is really cool.

It's really creative, and after looking through you some of your work I like this one the best.

write on

XD

I really like this. I can definitely see the David Firth inspiration. Very unique and very well written.

Wow i liked this. I liked how strange it was, and how things that were 'beautiful' in this story (like the bald spot) are the opposites to real life. The only thing that bugged me through the story was the 'second best friend' thing. I was thinkging, "If Jane is the second than who's the first?" In the end she was the true love, but does that mean she was the best best friend as well?

Insignificant really, just a thought.

There was one part where i think you left out the word heart: "I thought my was finally complete" i think you meant, i thought my heart was finally complete.

Overall i liked the weirdness of this, and i think i'll go read some of your other stories!

Wow. Wow. Wow. This is strange. Very strange. I am glad it is not as disturbing as some of your others, and I like it, not bad. Where do you come up with these things? WHY?

Well, anyway, thanks for a memorable read.

...seriously, my parents/friends would send me to a psychiatrist if I wrote stuff like this...

:D

Ha. This one is good too. Probably even better than Mr Adams Apple and Pamelton, because it has a better and more thought out ending. So cute.

Well, I liked where Pamelton was hit by a car.

But this guy is in love with a CORN KERNEL.

Genius.

0.0 Alrighty then. It was very cute. Kind of...strange. A popcorn kernel? Really?

Wow.

Nice.

I like.