Reviews for Jack Olsen: Private Investigator
rAiNwAtEr1 chapter 1 . 4/6/2017
I liked this, thanks for sharing.
Ri-chan27 chapter 1 . 10/29/2015
Loving IT! Beautiful! Awesome! Great! Witty~! Sweet!
So loved it and thank you for posting! Would so read this over.
Sparkly Shoes chapter 1 . 5/1/2015
Loved it! Couldn't stop smiling and cheering for them to get together.
nawakosaure chapter 1 . 10/24/2014
That was a real nice story. An original storyline and a good writing : you certainly can keep us on edge :-) I devoured it and enjoyed it immensely ! Thanks !
rockspapersnscissors chapter 1 . 9/27/2014
This is a really awesome one-shot, you could so make it into an actual story! XD
I really loved the whole idea, but I thought the pace towards the end was a little too rushed...
I have a few problems with the story, like how you glazed over Jack's main mission for enrolling back into highschool or the way you neglected to conduct his research. (My question being, if he's such a great detective, why didn't his mindset reflect that?)

I don't feel like you got into the mindset of his profession, so much as the mindset within his pants XD Not that I'm complaining, I love the smexy bits, but I do feel Jack and Brett's relationship was a rushed when it could have been an epic build up through minor plots. Jack situation seemed way too convenient... However, I do have a lot of things I liked about the story, first of all the way you actually incorporated literature within the fiction was awesome I really applaud that! :D

You have great characters, and I really loved Jack's entire attitude. I died at the silver sequin part, that was just hysterically epic! You really did a wonderful job!

Thanks for the great read,
-RPS
ria.green chapter 1 . 2/7/2014
nice!
Gay Satan chapter 1 . 12/20/2013
Well can i say DAMN?! God. That was such a great storyyyyyy! Loved it so much! Gotta read this to my bestie xD thanks for making my night. ...and i was SO TURNED ON BY THIS, HAHA, GOD. LOVED IT. NOW ON MY FAVE LIST.
EPuppy chapter 1 . 10/10/2013
I really really really loved this . so funny lovely sweet angsty cute happy ending faithful aw so perfect:3
R. Ficst chapter 1 . 5/25/2013
So freaking adorable, hilarious, and satisfying. Love the premise, love the characters. Great writing, great work!
babiishaq chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
love it all
RaeAnnLove chapter 1 . 4/9/2012
This was sweet I loved it and wish there was more!
too much booty in the pants chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
Felt a little rushed. I know that it's a one shot but IDK it's weird.

Regardless it was a really nice read kept me entertained between classes. Different storyline that I usually see.
Yusta chapter 1 . 3/18/2012
Short sweet and awesome. Thank you for the story.
AdriannaRomantica chapter 1 . 2/25/2012
That was quite a sexy short story. I really liked that you broke it down into short parts, rather than keep it as one extension. It was really interesting, and I rather enjoyed reading it. I liked how in the end, Brett's true character showed: he was quite the little sex fiend. haha

Anyways, thanks for sharing!
Kurami Elric xD chapter 1 . 2/8/2012
This was absolutely amazng. I havent been part of the FictionPress world for long..I have always been that FanFiction kind of person.

But I have read quite a lot. And this has to be the best thing I have read.

It was funny, cute, hot..just everything want in a story.

It was hilarious to tell you the truth. I needed a good laugh after a shitty day at school. Uhg, high school. Horrid little place it is.

My favourite part of school would be art. Because I'm a little artsy person. xP

God... get off track to easily. Anyway. When Jack was dumped for his alter-ego, that made me laugh. It was perfect. xD I love you, I love you.

~Jadyn
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