|Reviews for Daughter of the Earth|
| Lady of Spring Rain chapter 1 . 7/18/2007
Ah yes this one...I really did enjoy this one...I'm eager to read the next installment...
Wishing you happy writing and no writing blocks -
| J. A. Kossler chapter 1 . 7/17/2007
I'll make comments here as I read the story
1) The opening is cool. For a moment, I thought it might be an infodump (and it was getting dangerously close) but the last few lines were cool. First person POV, huh?
2) How does the narrator know all of these details of her father and mother meeting when she/he wasn't alive yet?
3) How does Nia[Imma call your protagonist Nia] know about humans? Did s/he have an encounter with them, or is it just fairy tales about humans?
4) I'm surprised her mother would let her go so quickly
Well, this seems to be a good story from the start! However, I would suggest cutting out useless narrative (there's a little of it packed here and there, and it kind of bogs down the story). I wonder what'll happen to her (yes, I figured out Nia is a her XD)?
(Please take a look at my story, too! :D)