Reviews for You Can't Hold On Forever
whispered something profound chapter 1 . 7/31/2007
i like this. i don't think it needs anything. thank you for the review!
A Madman with a Pencil chapter 1 . 7/19/2007
It's good. Kinda bleak...but I write like that sometimes, too.

Missing something? Maybe...ellipses at the end of the last line? ;)

Or perhaps you feel like you should add a line either before or after the last one. You could, of course, if you feel it improves the poem.

-AMP