Reviews for What If?
Solemn Coyote chapter 1 . 2/22/2008
I'm not entirely sure what to say about this one. I like it a lot. It's one of those unfocused rushes of ideas that I'm not convinced I can do. There are a lot of really cool concepts in here ("the moon was inhabited by undead"? Do you mind if I pocket that one for future use?) and I like the way the whole things was arranged by length, so that the poem sorta stretches with the reader's imagination. Or something like that. I was trying to come up with a good reason behind liking the way the poem looked.

Anyways, the only real critique I can come up with here is that the conclusion of the poem doesn't really tie anything together. But, seeing as this is mostly just a rush of ideas, saying that is like accusing an orange of being insufficiently pineapply.

Keep writing,

Somebody Over In The Corner chapter 1 . 9/11/2007
kind of makes you think rigth? thanks for all the help!
forty-two dreams chapter 1 . 7/26/2007
Indeed. You sound like an avid Catholic.
J. A. Kossler chapter 1 . 7/22/2007
I like these. I've actually used some:

The eyes really were the windows to the soul?

People’s classes were determined by birthmarks?

Technology was to people as witches were to Puritans?

Cool stuff, though! You should write a story on a few of your favorite ones. _


(Please review my story, too! :D)