|Reviews for A War of Oceans|
| rust phoenix chapter 1 . 7/23/2007
"I'm just drifting from one nightmare to the next,/switching trains at every stop,/sleepwalking to evade these crying alarms,/sleeptalking only to whisper your name."
I love your descriptions, I could really see all of this in my head. Sometimes your wording was amazing, but other times it wasn't as strong as it could have been and that detracted from the poem overall. Try to use your own metaphors rather than relying on cliches, it makes the read much more interesting and unpredictable. Anyway, I liked this poem a lot, keep writing.