how u came up with the idea of this story, i will never know...maybe when ur rich and famous you can enlighten us readers about the creation of this literary masterpiece, but for now...

I love Nix's personality! She's so quirky, and kid-like, a lovable ...excellent character...

Wow, usually I don't have the attention span for a story as long as this one, but your characters are very engaging and the story is well-developed and suspenseful! I couldn't stop once I started. Since I always try and scrounge up some CC though:

-I notice that when you deal with really dramatic material, such as Phoenix's past and the attack, you put it out in one big chunk. I think that the retelling of these events could be broken up a bit into paragraphs.

-Little plot issue: if Violet keeps being reborn, than the council killing her wouldn't have much of an effect, would it?

-I understand your trying to keep the light-hearted feel of the story, but all the playacting after Phoenix reveals the true situation feels unrealistic.

The story really is great material, and I hope you continue!

-RM

I love the sarcasm. -

I barely got around to review. I liked it a lot. Gave me a feel of how Vaughn and Nix live. :D Nice chapter.

Great chapter as usual (I reviewed as Emily before) but the lack of spacing in the longer paragraphs made my eyeballs hurt. I like Phoenix's constant inner battle of professionalness vs. unprofessionalness and when to be personal, it makes the story more believeable.

Phoenix just has an awesome sarcastic sense of humour and way of looking at things. I love her!

The relationship Nix and her assistant have is so funny, they're so in tune with each other and it makes for great comedic timing. I particularly liked the bit at the ending where he went from SWOON to doorknocker. :P You wouldn't by chance be from Michigan? Well, there could always be more than one ritzy Gross Pointe in the country, but I figured I'd ask!

I tried to review for the first chapter, but I accidentally hit enter before I was done! I LOVE the tone and style of the narrative, and the plot is fantabulous. I can't wait to see what happens next!

I love

I've been trying to keep up with stories Im interested in, but it failed, so. There. Nice chapter, very awesome quotes, and its very humourous to me. Im glad you're almost coming to a always the hardest part for me. When its a good story, and it ends. :D

Well i don't think I spotted any errors...

Anyway, no I didn't think you killed Vaughn (there wasn't much build-up to it, so I suspected that he would probably live-which is odd, cause sometimes I kill off my own characters without build-up). I actually thought you killed Tommy (that the shanguin got him before it came for Violet).

Now. This whole Tommy thing is just funny, for some wierdly odd reason. Haha, hurry up and post so I can see what happens!

What's Mr. Priss' name again? I think you did a good job on his character. He's not static, and he's an ass for a reason. It was cool the way they both shared their spaces and pasts in the end.

As for Vaughn and Nix...whatever, you know.

Aw crap. I wanted the candy...

I noticed two ommited words and one grammar error, yes, im THAT nitpicky. Even worse, I can't tell you exactly where they are, I forgot. But come to think of it, it's not really my job :/

But anyway, I enjoyed it. I didn't think it was that serious. Made me laugh really. Maybe my funnybone if oversized...(don't know how that matters in the first place..)

Good chapter, keep 'em coming

I'm reading this at night and it freaked me out (since I know most of the myths...) it's great. Now I need to get a glass of water on my nightstand and try to fall asleep.

Good chapter, I wonder what's bothering her about water? Update soon!