Reviews for Her
Lauren Wolfe chapter 1 . 8/30/2007
The first few lines made me smile - they're wonderful, really, in telling of your affection to this girl...but it suddenly breaks off. The mood becomes a bit heavier (Once I made her cry/How I regret/But even her tears/Gave me the feeling of awe) You describe her wonderful-ness, then suddenly bring this topic out of nowhere. I think you need to review the development of thought...could turn out better, really. Still, great use of emotion in your words _

Rock on! :)