Reviews for Twelve Minutes More
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 8/6/2007
It tells a story. Interesting.
Ashelin chapter 1 . 7/31/2007
This is also an intense poem. So many thoughts going on, like you're trying to distract yourself from the point of it all. You did a great job.
Kindre Turnany chapter 1 . 7/31/2007
You have a few errors in here, just little typo things you missed.

I didn't like the end; I don't know, I just don't feel like "ding-dong" is a fitting end for this. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. Maybe something more like "Waiting for the doorbell- / It rings." Or whatever.

Overall I really enjoyed it.