God I'm a freaking idiot! I tend to read stories without even checking the rating, -for example, I read one of All Over You's stories, Love Game, and I couldn't stop reading it, even though it's rated M, I'm addicted.-Like I am to this story, I'm only 13 and I read the first chapter to this story, I'm hooked. I guess it's too late now to stop reading. When I read a good story, I can't tear the book away from my face. So, I'm just gonna add you to my fav. authors list, since I'm going to hell anyway.

NOOOOO! Why'd he have to leave! D: But good lord, this story had me hooked from beginning to the end! Uhmazing! :))

love,love,love,love,love your story! There shuld be a sequel! ur a great writer!

LOVEE IT SO MUCHH! ((: you should deffiantely write the sequel. prety pleasee ((:

(: i love it, just not how i ended.

HAHA, they're just rubbing in each other's faces. xD immature

hahah i died laughing at this part:

Cupcake, on a normal day, I wouldn't be afraid of you if you came at me with a knife."

"I'll show you," I muttered, grinning wickedly.

"You're feisty," Jackson said silkily. "I think that's so sexy."

"Oh shut up!"

He laughed, resting a hand on my knee. "Yes ma'am."

When Jack and I entered the house Sam was sitting on the couch, staring at the door. The TV was off, all he was doing was waiting for us to get home. Jack looked irritated.

"Oh for the love of God!" He growled, throwing his hands up. "You caught us Sam! We went and got doughnut together! Please don't hate us!"

HOLY FUCK ! MY EX BF WENT TO EISENHOWER ! WOAH, YOU DO YOU GO THERE?

I totally agree with the whole love thing. i made sure to lay down the whole love crap in the beginning of school. now a days, teens say it like its a hello goodbye thing. love is big. dont make it like a meaningless word. but btw. im all for jackson. hes so much more mature than sam

Ok you write in a way which makes you interested in the story and want to know what happens next.

I just didn't really like Jackson as much as I felt you were writing him to be. It's like you wanted her with jackson at the end and I could tell. Some of the Sam things seemed just added in to get him out of the picture. At first the main character was ok and then I didn't like her, she seemed so weak and I didn't feel for her. I'm not into sibling love triangles, I don't find them appealing. I kind ofmlost interest at the end to and just skimmed it the rest of the way. Maybe don't rush into all this I like jack so much out of nowhere. It just seemed forced.

But you write in a way that's interesting.

This was a lovely story, wonderful concept and I truly like that you ended it the way you did, it's always good to have some mystery left :]

This is, I have to say, my favourite of the two stories you've written and I have read. Im just about to start reading ur sequel, and I think you should make a sequel for chasing elliot. :)

Beverly!

Wow what a shitastic week for Sam...breast cancer and HIV in the same week...

That sucks

I think this storyline is pretty cliche, but I think you work with it. One thing you might want to work on is your transitions. This chapter especially I felt like I was just jumping from one scene to another kind of like a montage without anything guiding me along.

I do like how you made it so she didn't love him. I think it would have been a little much for me after the cheating on him, shit with his brother, jealousy, etc that has all happened so far for her to just blurt it out. Guess I'll see what he says to Jack about it all.

just finished reading this story. it was so amazing. loved the ending

~Francine Brown