Reviews for Heartbreak
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 9/29/2007
konban wa

This song has very little substance to be honest. The rhyme scheme was well done - kudos on that part. But there were about three lines in between each chorus; you could definitely add more to this to make it brilliant!

Zaijen

-Shan-
Arafax chapter 1 . 8/2/2007
Nice work as always. I liked the rhyming on this, it was good.

Arafax
Beautiful Bones chapter 1 . 8/1/2007
Very enjoyable. I could almost relate to it. You could, however, concentrate on making it a little longer. This is probably a two-minute & 30 sec. song. I think you could work, and mend it into a nice 4 mins.

An A on the rhyming though.

Happy Writings!