Reviews for A Commonplace, Cliché Ridden, Comedic Carrying On
White Rabbit Tale chapter 3 . 8/25/2007
Sabrina is extremely likable, based on this chapter. I also like that you gave her a younger brother-not so young that he would be a burden to her, but not old enough to quite understand the inner-workings of the teenage psyche. That's a rare kind of sibling for these types of stories. Most common, of course, is the protective older brother. Must we always assume that older brother's are so protective that they scare away any potential love interest? Mine sure isn't!

Anyway, this was a short and cute chapter. I am starting to realize who might be the love interest...I hope I'm right. I am really curious about Sabrina's plan, though...no doubt it will be hare-brained and cracked-out, but it'll probably be very entertaining.
White Rabbit Tale chapter 2 . 8/21/2007
So, believe it or not I clicked on your pen name because it sounded so cool...but anyway, I'm glad I did because I enjoyed this little snippit of a beginning. I really hope you intend to continue with this story because it is great so far! You've set up your characters really well, and Sabrina's voice in particular is very distinct. The friendship between her, Heather and Ian is very realistic-their dialogue is tinged with enough familiarity for it to be natural without being obnoxious. You've struck a very delicate balance, so far, between cliche and original. It's comfortable and familiar without being trite. Rachel in particular strikes me as an interesting character. I feel like there's a lot you could do with her that isn't done with the usual blond bimbo girlfriend of the popular guy.

I also like how it isn't immediately clear yet who Sabrina will end up with. I feel like you could continue this ambiguity for a couple more chapters before it becomes the usual game of how and when they'll finally hook up (whoever THEY are.)

Anyway, I'm going to check out your other story now, because I'm sure it's quite as good as this one.
Sally Can Wait chapter 2 . 8/10/2007
YAY. I like Ian. He reminds me of someone, but I can't quite place it... I also like Justin. He looks like Harry Potter. xD Okay not really. But sort of. Gah, I'm such a nerd... And I like Giselle, because she has a spankin' awesome name.

Which reminds me, I have to go to the library, because I have six books on hold. o.o

I really like this story so far. Seriously. It's so cute! And fluffy. And one of the only stories I can actually pay attention to on this stupid website.

kbye.

-Sally
Chelseamuffin chapter 2 . 8/9/2007
Friend (hope you don't mind that I call you that. It's one of my three greetings XD), I liked this a lot. Sabrina wins my heart a lot. And no comment about her weirdness around Aaron, because... I don't know anyone, but everyone's different and there has to be SOMEONE.

And Justin- green eyes are win. They just ARE with me. And a very common FPC colour. But you know, I melt for green eyes all the time, because that's how I am. I somehow sense the Sab/Justin going to end the story XD (I'm still hoping for some Aaron/Sab, cos it'll be fun to see Jealous Justin.)

Um, well. I don't know- something about Brina's narrative voice gets me and I love it and it makes me laugh and seems natural. It's just yes with this.

I have no more to say. I now take my leave :D

Stealth Muffin- out.
Counting Petals chapter 2 . 8/8/2007
I hear Sab about the license thing. I'm heading off to college next month, and I'm still nowhere close to getting mine. (At least I have my permit. Two of my friends don't even have that yet.)

Oops. That tutoring session should be delightfully awkward, I hope. )
Sally Can Wait chapter 1 . 8/6/2007
Yay :D

I'm really tired and my fingers hurt but I like it and it was good because it was surprisingly not cliche, in a way, for fictionpress. So...kthnxbye.

-Sallykins :D
Counting Petals chapter 1 . 8/6/2007
I laughed so hard at this. I hope you update it soon, because I can't wait to read more! (Hahaha...the porn star conversation...)
druggieaddict chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
Hey, I love this story! It's so cute! I actually laughed out loud at the end. Good job, and keep it up!
Chelseamuffin chapter 1 . 8/2/2007
I positively love Sabrina's interaction with her friends And the porn star convo- I laughed. A lot.

Um. I pretty much liked it all, but have to cut this review short. (This time, it's true- I usually use that as an excuse for a crappy review XD) My brother's here. I don't like him. If I stay, it'll only end in flames O.o

So yes. I adored this first chapter, and hope for an update whenever you're ready.
Aims11085 chapter 1 . 8/2/2007
I like this a lot! Very cute, and I love my cliches! ... Can't wait to see where you go with this! :)
em chapter 1 . 8/1/2007
im liking this new story:D
curious.soul chapter 1 . 8/1/2007
Nice first chapter. I'm interested to see where this is going
kay chapter 1 . 8/1/2007
hahhaha i loved this!

it has a lighter tone compared to your other fic!

cute D
Jool chapter 1 . 8/1/2007
I love this story already! The conversations flow real easily. Very funny. Love the hot/porn star talk at the party. Please update soon. I actually laughed out loud. Oh, I also liked her dumbass comment - I find myself doing that sometimes. Great work. Your ever faithful reader, Jool
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