I really enjoyed this, it was written really well with the right amount of chapters. The story line was really good, nothing drawn out, just along at the right pace.

Great Story.

aww i loved this story! D

YES RUN AWAY ! PLEASE ! OMG ! I LOVE THIS STORY AND I FUCKING LUV YU FOR WRITING IT !

Your story was the best story i have ever read that was in the same situtation i had been in 2 years ago. And i look back and think right now that your story gave me a happy ending

I really am happy that she ended up with Leon. To bad they had to run away to be together. I liked the story. Good Job.

bloody hell,. 'wreckage' is certainly an apt title for this story. I cant imagine it happening to me - I'd die probably. But then again I'm sure its a cliched tale many teens go through these days. but I've got to give you props for writing something thats a near resemblance to reality, and not something one would expect to read here on FP.

all that aside though, if you have a chance to edit this please do, it has potential to be a good summer book.

This story was absolutely amazing it was the first and the best story i have read on this site so far, but i'm sure it will still be in the future. :D

This was a great story and I loved it.

Tanya

just wanted you to know that i loved your story ) and can't wait for read more of your work D

I'm going to be blunt and say that you really, really, REALLY need to do some hardcore editing on this story. Some of the chapters were painful to read.

Now I have some questions: Why was it such a bad thing that Kaelyn was 17 and Leon was 20? That's only a 3 year gap. Leon was getting a little too freaked out about that. I mean, yes, she is jailbait to him... but that didn't seem like the reason why he was upset. It seemed like he was upset because she was too young.

Also, I don't know if I skipped over the part where you said it, but how long were Chase and Kaelyn going out for? Aren't they both still in school? And isn't it too young to ask someone to marry at age 17?

In one of the chapters you were explaining Kaelyn's family. Saying that they were stuck up and pompous... but NOT arrogant ( I believe). I hate to say this but pompous means arrogant.

Your story has a good concept, it just needs some adjustments.

what are you talking about? you should be proud of this story it was AWSOME! i really enjoyed it! i look forward to reading some of your other stories too!

wow, i really liked the epilogue, it was such a nice ending, that it left me feeling pretty happy

to the story in general, i can only say thank you. there are so many stories out there, but just a small part really involves sex in any (good) way. in most stories the girls are the innocent virgings waiting for after marriage to sleep with their boyfriends, former man whores - and frankly i hate it! i really do when they all talk about sex as if it is the most sacred thing and virginity is something precious .. i don't mean to sound mean or anything, but i think people with these kind of opinions need to put their morals right, i mean sex is one of the most natural things in life and we have the privilege to enjoy it, so why say that it is dirty ... but i better stop talking about this topic because i can get really into it ... what i wanted to say is that i really enjoyed this story because it wasn't so .. conservativ, much more natural and i really appreciate this!

my constructive critism is that you could have gone more into detail - i'm not sure if i can explain what i mean exactly, i mean you could have gone more into detail with their feelings or just had more dialogues between the leading characters all in all i would have liked to know more about the leading characters, although you had much information about them, i felt like there was something missing which would help me to connect to the characters ... i hope you understand what i mean, because i can be quite confusing at times ... oh and i would have liked to know how she was so sure it was his baby ... or if he loved her so much that he didn't care if the baby was really his or not .. or maybe i kinda overread it ..?.

- but i don't think of it as a major thing. i think even though she was a bit naive, this story is very realistic and i like that. i fancied the way you described the characters, especially leon .. you made him sound really yummy .. hehe.. and it was a real pleassure to read how he and her acted around eachother.

conclusion: great story!

Comical, and inspiring. I definitely am favoriting this story. I was actually working on a story much similar to this one...and it's great...I mean yours! As soon as I can, I will be reading more and commenting..hell, soon enough you'll be on my favorite author's list! Keep writing!

Aw

That was just so sweet I loved it, and then they ran away, oh it just made me squeal, so cute and lovely and just aw.

JM