|Reviews for All about freedom|
| Margaret DeLucia chapter 1 . 2/28/2011
I like this alot :) Could you check out my stories? I could use the reviews and I would value your oppinion :)
| StoryMonster chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
The only things I didn't like about this - grammar and punctuation. Use one punctuation mark and fix your grammar! They're pretty important.
But the whole concept was captured very well, and I admire that.
| Cecilia A chapter 1 . 12/26/2010
I like the message, but the grammar is really bad. It makes it hard to understand. Other than this it's good.
| Raaawr Ima Dinosaur chapter 1 . 12/17/2010
This is true in so many ways.
amazing poem, you are yet to disappoint me.
Great job :)
| Kindre Turnany chapter 1 . 8/3/2007
Use. One. Punctuation. Mark. Seriously. Are you twelve? I just checked your profile and, no. You're actually older than me. Write like it. Never use multiple question marks. And not every sentence ends in an ellipsis. It's fine every once in a while, but this is too much.
"The world I have seen there was no freedom in this world…." That doesn't make sense. and say world once, please?
Um. Check for typos and errors. Check a lot. They're everywhere.
And your grammar's horrible. I guess all I can say is: read an English textbook. It's all backwards and weird. Are you used to a foreign language with dramatically different sentence structure than English? That's what it sounds like...
I think I might have liked this if not for all that...