Reviews for Sail Across the Sky
Master Judgment chapter 1 . 7/30/2008
This was very well-written. I especially like your colorful descriptions of the characters and your choice of diction. However, I would try to improve the sentence fluency and avoid the unnecessary ellipses. From what I've read so far, I think your commenting on how women are restrained in society. Perhaps the corset is a metaphor of this, or perhaps I'm over-analyzing the story.

Nevertheless, this is an interesting story that has massive potential.
Anehalia chapter 3 . 10/29/2007
This is turning into a good story. I think that it will just get better as you go along. Remember, prolouge chapters are good. You also had really good descriptions. Keep writing!
maidengarnet chapter 2 . 9/4/2007
Excellent... great story, now... write more! Yes! I must read more! muahahaha...
Aiedial chapter 2 . 9/4/2007
looking forwards to the next chapter!
loudkiwa chapter 1 . 8/5/2007
Very nice begining. I liked it. Keep writing and improving! There's always room to improve!

Although, right now, I can't find anything for you to improve on!
A Gypsy's Charm chapter 1 . 8/4/2007

I do hope you will continue writing/updating this story. It has great potential.

And I must say...

I feel bad for that prince! xDD
horsechick118 chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
Very good beginning. I like your characters, and it is written very well. Please write more!
One Shot Fanatic chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
I LOVE IT! Your beginning was a bit confusing, I didn't see how it tied into the story. I like your choice of words, but, my mom also read this and said that you are wordy and you need to watch your tenses. You switch from past tense to present tense constantly.

I look forward to the next chapter. Thank you.
Aiedial chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
hm me likes it. whens the next chapter? lol. your descriptions are quite vivid and images pop into my head pretty darn quickly...continue please!
Rebecca Cold chapter 1 . 8/4/2007
I'M IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY! So interesting, and I like the point of view from which it's written. Interesting and very good, new ideas, it's wonderful, and I can't wait to read more.

The only criticism I could think of is that you do something I tend to do too: I sort of write in circles, and don't really get to a particular point. Sometimes just SAYING something is better than trying to say it, hm, artfully?

xo check out my stories sometime.