Wow, so controversial but you handled this so well. I'd have loved to read more, to find out what happens with them. Anyway, i thought this was beautiful; in concept and in delivery

I cannot believe this only has 11 reviews its fantastic with lovely description and amazing character development congratulations on writing such a piece of writing !

OMFG! WOW! That is amazing, it beautifully written, breathe-takingly described and brillinatly informative! I take my hat off to you! ;D

This was so brilliantly written that I could vividly imagine the struggle of the priest. I love the way you have written Ly and his points of view were fantastic. Great story and thanks for the good read!

wow awesome story

At times it is hard to find a well written story, so I was sad with the knowledge that this wasn't going beyond one chapter. Not that I want you to go continue it that is.

Everything fights nicely the way it is.

I'm trying to see the 15 year old as a mature 15 year old. I have seen them, so I can live. The priest was abit typical but you worked it well.

I can guess he came from England, but I applaud your efforts for not nailing down the place he came from or the place he was ate when he found Ly. I have a number of guesses for why you did that.

Very well written like I said before. Good job.

I stumbled over from btw. Ya... I'm another breed. My author name over there is Jhoy. Ya, I never did the hiding thing well. I'm looking to making the leap over here so you might see me soon. :)

Night and have a good weekend.

Dear writer. A very well written story. It held my attention as not many on FP do. However, I didn't like the ending. After refusing to leave, you have the character give in and leave with priest, but don't give us any reason at all. You have to CREATE Drama and then resolve it. There is an arc.

I also did not feel any emotion, any real tie between the two characters. You have to dig deep into their thoughts. You have to know what your characters are thinking even if you don't write it down on the page. This is called backstory.

If you are over 18 please feel free to read my slash. And keep writing. You are good!

What I like about this story is that how it relates to religion and beliefs. I'm a believer myself, but some things need to be questioned, like what Ly did.

But the strange thing is, although Ly is said to be 15, he seem rather mature for his age. I kinda expected Ly to be a bit more playful and agressive. The ending is a little vague, but I'm glad Ly decided to come home with the Priest.

I love Ly so much :] I like the story and the ending is really good. The fact that he didn't give up his belief is more believable. I love the parts where Ly talks about how desire is not sinful and the part where he explains why he refuses to believe in God. I know that feeling. People say that without suffering there would be no compassion...but tell that to those who suffer. Finding faith is a difficult thing so I love how you've intergrated everything in this story well.

I LOVE THIS!

You're a great writer, and brought up some really interesting arguments here. You should extend this and publish it. Seriously.

Rather amazing. Your characterization is wonderful. You really tackled the issues here instead of skirting around them, which added a lot to the story. Great work.

Very well-written, same as your other story. I think some aspects of this story are a bit... fantastical, perhaps? Not realistic.

The ending and the beginning don't quite match. The beginning paragraph is dark, and a bit angry (the character seems angry at himself). Yet the ending is happy, joyful, exuberant. I don't understand how the introduction ties in with the rest of the story except to introduce the characters, in a way.

Again, amazing writing, and characters as well. I think complex, developed characters are a rare find on Fictionpress, and I'm glad you've done so (with both your stories). Despite the romance in this, I wouldn't really classify this story as romance, because I think it's more about a personal journey and gaining wisdom. *So thus, I don't think I'll add it to my c2.

However, these are just my thoughts. I thank you again for your suggestions - if you really want them to be in our c2, you could suggest it to the staff if you desired. Thank you again; I'm very glad there is some quality writing here on FP.

You know, finding a good well written story on fictionpress is like trying to find a needle thrown into the ocean. But with this story I do believe I've found that damn needle.

This...was so well written, so powerful, so detailed and completely believable. It sounds as if its based on a true story, it's so real...I feel as if i can touch it.

I admit that when I first read it I cringed at two things. The idea of having to read a story of religion and of a priest falling in love with such a young boy. Naturally the first thing I got past was the idea of the priest and Ly. :P But the religious aspect kept nagging me. Mostly because I agree whole heartedly with Ly, and its always hard to hear, and read about your beliefs possible being wrong, and you being "misguided".

I loved Ly's character, the Priests as well. I like their stark differences, but I also enjoyed seeing the similarities. Honestly I was VERY worried about the ending. I dont know what I thought would happen, but in the beginning it sounded like you were foreshadowing. I thought for sure Ly would be killed, or the Priest would be...well, whatever happens to priests when they're found out. But no, :) it was a soft happy ending, and for that I thank you! I do ADORE my happy endings!

This was an amazing story, one I wont easily forget. I hope you attempt a chaptered piece of fiction. And should you ever come out with a book, let me know, I'll buy it to support you! :)