|Reviews for Homeless|
| Andher chapter 1 . 8/10/2007
Nice imagery and authenticity of topic.
"It is old
Sexless street person
Aged by a million things
a spot on the glitzy façade
of the Atlantic"
Great imagery there.
Although I'm not too much of a fan of free verse, I really liked this piece.
And you've spelled 'minutes' as 'minuets' in some parts, I think.
Could use commas and other punctuation in certain places, to add to the flow.
Unless you intended to leave 'em out, of course.
Overall, it was pretty good.
If you need more crit, just ask.
Oh, and check out some of my work when you get time.