PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE put up another chapter!

I really like your story!

It is kind of reminicant of the TWILIGHT books;but that is a total compliment.

Great story, hoope to read more!

Oh and by the way, about 3/4 of the way down ch.1, you spelled hazel Hazel. Nothing big, thought I'd let you know.

Yay So I like the plot and story a lot...it's certainly unique, and there are only a few errors...mainly just noun/verb agreements, like "...but your emotions and your heart is still in tune..." And while I like the change of perspective from the previous chapter to this one, it's just...a review. Ace's point of view would have been so much better if it gave a far briefer-and I'm talking REALLY brief here...maybe a paragraph or two- review and then continued the story from where Cadi's pov left off.

I really like what you've got here. It's a nice little beginning. But... (there always is a but, isn't there?) I think you need to round it all a little bit. Even as a prologue it's lacking something to keep us reading. A reason we should care enough about Cadi to keep reading. I'm sure you can do it, you just need to fill it out a bit more (in my opinion).

I'll keep reading. Good work!

Hey there, Shojogurl

I just wanted to say that I like your idea here.

Hope you write more soon!