Reviews for Under the Heavy White Sun
A.P. Gregory chapter 1 . 8/20/2010
I think that you have an interesting premise. I think that your story would benefit greatly from more description because right now it is almost all dialogue which can get annoying. Another thing is that the mayans and aztecs were two very different factions. To say the "Aztec Mayan religion" is a little too broad.
Dr. Dreyyy chapter 1 . 10/13/2007
u suck losar just give up riting FOREEVER
penguinfragger chapter 5 . 9/8/2007
Good ending to this chap. You put a nice dose of suspense and add an intriguing new character. Keep it up!
penguinfragger chapter 4 . 9/2/2007
So far so good. I thought the first chapter was a bit rushed, we didn't get much detail about future Earth except for the super-oppressive and hierarchical working conditions (which were very good btw). I'm wondering what'll happen to our characters, and how they'll evolve in this new society. So far you're doing a good job of depicting it, keep it up!
Hsargz chapter 2 . 8/20/2007
Good story, still waiting for them to get to the planet though, Is the wife gunna die again?