The start is very intruiging, I like the beginning and the letter personally. Now, what was his name again?

And now, I shall add this to my 'notify' list.

woah..is she dead? don't let her die! And why are the police coming?Did Blake and Lisa call them?

Btw i loved this chapter, loved it...i love the whole story...hope you update soon

Oh that assholee! Omg pls don't tell me she's gonna die!

OMG! Who's gonna save her? I ned to know! Thanks for the chapter! Update Soon!

OH MY GOSH! Amazing! Gavin Mecozzi, what an awesome name, this whole thing was genius.

My only question is how does GM not hear Blake and Lisa and Val talking? I'm assuming he wouldn't let them be that far behind?

And why haven't they tried to escape before now, out of curiousity? Just some things that may need to be cleared up a little.

I can hardly wait for the next chapter.

oh my god! what an evil cliffy! amazing chapter but evil, evil cliffy! haha. keep it up and please update soon. I am dying to know what happens next!

Faith

Have you happened to read the book Night?

Because, though the plots are diffrent, they are still the same. White trying to put the people aginst each other to see who could withstand it. Very creative. A little creepy, but very good, none the less. Can't wait to see how it ends. 8]

Alice

GM is so interesting. Like everything about him. He's like the perfect guy but the worst guy at the same time... It's so strange. I'm attracted to a character in a story. Ugh. Creepy but he's just... Mysterious and... I don't know... Amazing. Haha. But, if he WAS real I probably would not even LOOK at him. Well, that is, if I knew what he was doing. If not i'd probably stare and drool... I want to know what he was like when he was younger. Like, Valerian should find his mother's diary or something and it says that he broke his sister's barbie dolls or caught the house on fire or something. I'm really interested in his past... And I really REALLY like this story. You should have it published or something. I'm sure you could make good bucks for this, it's absolutely amazing.

I don't know if you said this before but does GM mean game master or is that his initials?

I'm really glad that I'm not the only one who can't swim XD years ago I almost drowned, but at least the water was clean and there were fish and corals. any roads, great chapter. his surname is beautiful!

Quick update! Thanks! Omg, that chapter was so freakin awesome! Wow, Val is so attracted to GM or should I saw Gavin. Lol. But she really is, I'm glad she learned to say no. When they were by the pond and the sirens came I was like "Yeah, their all gonna be saved now!" And then he pushed her into the pond. I wanted to kill him myself after that! Haha!

Please update soon because I am lovin the story!

PrematureLlama

Oh em gee. Not only was his name revealed, but it ended in an evil cliffhanger! Oh man oh man. Brilliant. I love how Val is slightly attracted to Gavin (haha, I can say his name!) Brilliant, utterly brilliant. I can't wait for you to update soon!

omg! i don't like gm one bit now. is he cursed or what? no sane person goes around killing people. he really doesn't deserve val!

Wow! I loved this chapter! Thanks for the update! I was waiting! She finally said she'll be with him. Jeez...amazing! Sad that Blake has Lisa's name on his paper...

Can't wait for the next chapter! More GM and Val! Woot!

PrematureLlama

Boy, do I feel slow. It took me a while to realize that they are dressed according to the chess colors, black and white. At first I was like, 'Why are they not wearing black too,' then I realized why. Duh! I could have slapped myself on the forehead.