This story reminds me of a book series I read long long ago called The Forbidden Game. Just the whole game aspect...but then again, alot of stories remind me of alot of things. Oh, James doesn't love Val...is this curtains for him then? Or will GM use James as bait? *dramatic music* Next time on "Horrorscape"...dun dun DUN!

...Well... Duh. (Right?)

Most girl/boyfriends don't love each other. They like each other, or else they wouldn't be going out...

Anyways thank you for updating! Very interesting. (I like that you give definitions of the chess terms you're using as titles.)

It's interesting that the whites vanished, have they done this before? (Have each of them done it in each of their houses to certain people?)

- Selfish, Tainted -

Alas, I finally remembered my password to log in so I could review your story! I kept on getting it mixed up with my email password, so I had to find the paper I wrote it on but I couldn't so I had to look in the trash can /; I found it, only with some other pleasantries DX

Anyways, I was in shock when I read the ending. I mean, I agree with the reviewer who said, "James Deserves to get kicked where it hurts" ... But I'll save my rant for later on in this review. YAY!

["You are being hunted," Blake repeated the words on the wall, turning to look at the frightened and confused faces around him. Even the white players looked a bit uncertain.] THEY BETTER BE FRIGHTENED! If that was me, I'd be frightened too and proceed to scream until someone slapped me. Y'know, just to loosen the mood. Or, scream, wail by arms and run out. I'm serious, the people who do that know how to get the party started.

Wait ... what? Right now, I'm not making any sense so I'm just going to move on before some more nonsense comes out of my ... computer keyboard.

[James walked over to the wall and touched the paint. It was sticky and came off on his fingers, sinking into the creases of his fingerprints.] Wow-o, when I read that an image of ... you know those scenes in the movie where the innocent person kills someone by accident and they have the blood all over they're palms and they look at it, revolted like: O_O or O.O that's what I saw.

[Three certain people were missing from the room. "The white team just let," James said, looking annoyed. "Why wasn't anyone watching?"] Well are they supposed to sit there? I'm not liking James D: Why wasn't anyone watching? Why wasn't HE watching?

[Funny how applicable it seemed. Except Blake didn't think it was very funny at all.] I'd laugh, but it'd be one of those 'ha-ha-this-isn't-really-funny-this-is-serious-but-I'm-trying-to-lighten-up-the-mood laugh. I did that once, because my cousin broke his leg and I tried to lighten up the mood and the adults glared at me until I stopped. And then I got sent to my room D:

[Blake frowned. It shouldn't take painted threats to make someone realize their girlfriend might be in trouble.] I know, really the nerve of James. But then again, that just proves that their relationship needs some serious TLC and that they need to really put some more time in to improve it. But I don't think that Blake is in any position to critize since he could have went to look for Val himself, because if he saw that Val was absent - then he should have gone to look for her. But then again, that should really be James department.

["I'm going to find Val," he said

"Good luck," Blake said, honestly.] Bababa-wha? Blake and Lisa should go and help - like the Scooby Doo Gang minus the Dog and Daphne (I guess I'd consider Val as Daphne since she did get captured for the first round and Daphne ALWAYS gets captured in Scooby Doo.) But then again, if James goes missing (like he did), Blake and Lisa would have to search for James and would most likely run into GM or get caught by one of the opposing White players, cause someone from the white team probably pulled them out of the hat.

["What's with the hero complex?" Lisa wondered, after James had left.] LOL, I could imagine James as Batman or Superman ... how can they wear those tight tights? I mean, aren't they chaffing or something?

James would probably say something like this, "Never fear. Help is here ... what seems to be the problem?" Yeah ... I have an overimaginative imagination so forgive me.

[And a bedroom was, well, private.

Very private.

"Of course," he was saying, "if you'd wanted to get in that badly, you could have asked me. I would have let you in...] ;D He-e-e-ey ... is it just me, or was GM making some not Kiddie rated implications. Or maybe I just have a dirty mind ...

[What...? He inhaled sharply in surprise, effectively filling his lungs.

Oh shit, he thought, and collasped.] No! James, are you that stupid to smell something that was thrust into your face! But aside from that, how did anyone not see that coming. I'm so in uber(? - sorry, those darn fangirls with their lingo have scrambled themselves into my mind) awe of GM that Val better fall in love with him or I'll ... I'll take his top hat!

No really, I want to go as Willy Wonka for Halloween and need a top hat. Either that, or I'll go as Jimi Hendrix. Eh.

[ A sharp coldness on his throat made him jolt upright, nearly causing him to cut himself. He forced himself to lean back, but his body was rigid with apprehension.

Was that ... a knife?]Whoa, now we all know GM is crazy about Val (Understatement) but I didn't think he was THAT crazy. But come on, GM don't kill James. He's not worth it.

["No, I don't." James added, realizing his answer had been taken for defiance. He paused, as if knowing he was condemning himself. "I don't love Valerian.] Once again, I shall repeat: Babababa-wha? What does he mean he doesn't love her ... I'll, I'll, ergh D:/ But then again, like I said before they don't have THAT (it would be better if I could but the emphasized words in italics -.-; I mean, I don't like to write like I'm screaming, unless well I am) kind of relationship. But, ... I don't even have anything to say except ...

Either way James is still screwed. D:

Alas, my review comes to an end (which your probably content about) YAY! I have to finish my assignment for school anyways, I have to draw a map! of Uruguay but my drawing skills sux majorly so I'll probably spend all night on it.

- Tainted Selfish - Which One for my halloween costume: A) Willy Wonka, B) Jimi Hendrix or C) A Cardboard box?

I was starting to feel sorry for James. Coz I thought GM might kill him if he found him wandering around the house but I kinda don't now ...

Update soon!

Good, I like the fact you don't take forever.

JAMES DESERVES TO GET KICKED WHERE IT HURTS! seriously not even kidding. How do you like IT by the way? I read that book in eighth grade hehe it kicked ass the movie's just funny though not even scary very disappointing. Do you listen to nightwish at all since you said you dont like all the american stuff.

Nice story. I really like these type of stories, with the guy being very dark and to the point of obsessive. But i was wondering whether GM and Valerian would actually fall in love in the end.

I love your story and have been a loyal reader since the beginning. Where are you going with this story? I don't mean to be rude, and I will continue reading it to the end. But I have no idea where you are going with this. It's a nice change from alot of the other stories on this site. Please update the first chance you get. I can't wait to find out what's going to happen next.

that story you referenced at the beginning, i can't right remember the title at the moment, but i know which one you're speaking of. but, in the end of that one, the hunted became the hunter and killed his captor, i believe the closing words were something along the lines of " he had never slept in a more comfortable bed". possible illusion or foreshadowing? :)

Dude, I've read the story you mentioned in here. haha. So, I liked this chapter, as usual. Hah. You know, this would make an awesome movie. Especially with halloween coming up. No lie. Well, keep it up and update soon!

Faith

O, thats probably not going to please GM. Awesome story by the way! Can't wait for the next update!

oh. my. god. this was so good! please update soon! ahh...GM is freaking the FUCK out of me, and my GOD you're good at making him do that! I actually pity James, although I never really liked him much, to be honest. but you have to update soon or I shall die of anticipation. okay. bye bye.

oh my god. I couldn't breathe at the end.

That was horrifying! James can't die. *sobs*

The Val part was chilling too. Was that GM?

Everything is so complicated and confusing that it's so scary!

But I like the adrenaline. :P

Okay, I don't think I'm making any sense. *chuckles*

again a wonderful chapter, and every time i like a lot more the characters a very good job!

Hmm, it's odd that GM chooses chess as a hunting game. True if one side is much better than another you can toy with them, but for a -challenging- one you'd want a player of equal or greater knowledge than yourself.

Ah, thank you for updating.