Sorry about not reviewing the last chapter, my computer was retarded. You aren't going to have gore in this are you? My brother (See profile) has been reading my stories, and he is easily scared. I just want to know so I can get him to quit reading it.

Thanks,

WBW

why does this kinda remind me of Phantom of the Opera? Wow...tis is pretty awesome

Holy cow. This is definitely starting to get intense. I'm definitely looking forward to the future chapters. I'm guessing that when GM asked Val if she danced with the devil before and she replied no, that he's in a way calling himself the devil? Well, great chapter! :D

I love this!

This is really interesting. The plots gotten me lost, but I think thats cool. Most stories are too obvious. This ones not. Continue! Its really good.

I am in love with this story. I love how you have a deep chess theme going (I can't play...well I can, but I suck...but I'd LIKE to play really well..). GM creeps me out...is that a good thing? And poor Val! But onto the next chapter, let's see what' behind door number one!

Wow, that is really good. I read this non-stop, not even pausing to review. I LOVE these kinds of stories. GM seems like quite the character, although EXTREMELY creepy, but that's what I like about him. Valerian's name is totally awesome, and good job with the research you put into that. I also like how you bring chess moves (or at least I think they're chess moves) into the beginning of each chapter, which is really cool. I don't think I like James that much, but we'll see how that works out. Oddly, I like Blake, but his character hasn't developed as much. I think I don't like James just because he's younger than Val, but if he's heroic in the end, I'll like him better. I can't wait to read about the mysteries of GM's house and the boy in the picture. Secret passageway in a closet. I'm guessing GM didn't think Val would find it. Or did he? LOL. Great writing!

- Selfish, Tainted -

YAY! At first I was all 'story for me to ... terrorize!' But then, I realized that your writing is superb and if not somewhat chilling (coughcough GM coughcough). Hehe, don't worry - I DON'T terrorize writers ... What? I don't. D:

Anyways, I find myself entangled with the character GM. I mean, you let us know that he's infatuated with Valerian ... or that GM is in limerence with Valerian. But other than that, you don't give us much details into his background except for the picture of the kid which leaves us, the readers for more (or just me?).

I can tell, that GM isn't envious of James - James is a coward, prey yet GM is envious that he caught Valerian so he's probably going to be like, "Capture the pawns (her friends) that protect the king to get to the Queen" - I haven't figured out that theory right now and I think that I'm just trying to make sense of the Chess being related to this.

Oh! Oh! GM reminds me of that guy that Ice-T plays in the movie Mean Guns who was watching all the contestants through a monitor :D. The letter in chapter one to Val was forward, but then again GM is somewhat forward ...

You can just tell that James and Valerian don't really have THAT kind of connection. There too accusatory of one another, well Val because for a moment she pondered the possibility that it could have been James. Sure, they were friends before but they might not have been GOOD friends before - like how you may call someone your friend just based on how they present themselves to you but you do not really know of their personality until it starts to surface. I guess, like an interpersonal relationship. And he didn't exactly wish to know who the letter was from, whenever I receive a letter my best guy friend is all 'whose it from?' and 'do I know this person?'.

The phone call ... I can't describe it. James is going to a party, he doesn't know who this guy is and they still went? I'd stay home, not me. Nope.

White against Black, hmm ... Chessboard colors! Wow, am I sooper smart or what? D: Don't answer that. Anyways, the white pieces are his allies - reporting to him, as if the fort was on fire. Charlie is rude -.-; but she's defensive because she probably thinks Val is pushing up on GM.

Too bad, Val got caught. Alrighty, well just one more chapter left until I am left to find new prey. James left ... HOW COULD HE LEAVE? That ... and ... but Valerian is in trouble. You don't have to tell us, we can just y'kno tell. GM isn't exactly all "I bake cookies for the homeless." .. because if he did, then that would be creepy. Can you picture it?

KISS, KISS, KISS! Aw, she wouldn't kiss him. But, then again I wouldn't kiss him either so ... yeah. I liked the part where we found out a piece of information - the picture about the boy, but who is it? MAybe it was GM when he was younger. Please don't let his family turn out like Leatherface's where they drug Valerian and kill all her friends. :/ I still hate that movie.

Anyways, my review is coming to an end so I'll just add this reeally quickly: Please don't make GM all insane and be like, "You could of had me, why Valerian," and then go into this whole thing about how he was always picked on and stuff. That just ruins the whole story and I hate when authors do that -.-; but alas, it is your story so free feel to do whatever you like with it. .

- Tainted Selfish - Didn't take her meds today :D (There really Orange flavored tic tacs, ever ate them? They delicious :D)

P.S - Sorry for leaving such a long review

I totally like where this is going, I like the character GM so far...I like creepy boy lol! cant wait for more! hope you update soon

Your stories always happen to make my breath caught in my throat.

And the horror of the story is so tense I can feel it.

You make incredible stories. So incredible it sends chills down my spine.

Oh man. This is starting to get really interesting. James seems a bit of a dull character. And GM is really dark I must say. Are the people on the white team friends? I hope you update soon. :)

Great chapter. :D

Ah, a secret door! Dun dun dun! lol. So, the whole James leaving thing, that was just rude of him. What a protective boyfriend lol. Loving the story, hating the creep. The usual. Great chapter; keep it up and update soon!

Faith

GM is creepy. Poor Val being locked up :( .

Update soon! This chapter was really good.

I liked this chapter. And I also don't have any questions that come to mind...

Well does GM know about the door in the room? And what will happen to the other players, do they get sent to the same room?

Thanks for writing another great chapter

Lilly

Rockin'! :D I'm so glad to find your update- it was great! Not going to lie, I was rooting for the kiss, but I know how it goes. ;) hehehe Super cool. I loved it muchly. You really have a neat writing style...it flows brilliantly, a very comfortable, great voice. :) Lovely work!